to hear is of the utmost

A Poem By Aalen Fideli // 3/17/2011

once apon a time, a phrase, a trap.

to snare a reader, even mayhap

to draw you in to hear a tale

of long ago, behind the veil of time

a story, a legend, to tell to hear.

listen now and turn thy ear

to a story of knights and princesses fair

we fly through time, we fall through air.

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I like it! :)

It's sort of has the quality of a dream someone's having. It flows nicely. Keep it up! And welcome to Apricot Pie! :)

Madeline | Fri, 03/18/2011

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

I like this!

 I really like this! It makes me think of all the old stories I love. Only thing I'd say is the rhyming feels inconsistent. Couldn't you say '' behind time's veil'' instead of ''behind the veil of time'' ?

  Don't misunderstand, because I really like this poem. :)

 

Kathleen | Fri, 03/18/2011

Behind the veil of time

Behind the veil of time sounded perfect to me. Don't change it.

Welcome and good job on the poem :)

Maks | Fri, 03/18/2011

Cool poem! And I welcome thee

Cool poem! And I welcome thee to the website!

Renee | Fri, 03/18/2011

thanks

thank you guys. and i was going to put "behind time's veil" but decided that a sort of "trippy" rhyme sounded better.

Aalen Fideli | Fri, 03/18/2011

Music I created
[updated]

Welcome big brother

Welcome big brother to ApricotPie, the place I always disappear to when I have nowhere else to go. Enjoy. (And post 'Epic Fantasy' soon).

Arya Animarus | Fri, 03/18/2011

Oh for the times when I felt invincible.

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