Tomorrow Is A Question

A Poem By airlia // 9/12/2009

Today is always waiting,
Yesterday has always been,
Tomorrow is a question,
What might it bring?

What will the morning bring?
What will the evening tell?
What will afternoon say?
What will all these tell?

Will it be important?
Will it change a life?
Will it bring joyful songs?
Or nothing, save woe and strife?

What may be done
With the time we have?
What will all this come to?
So we will always wonder.

Smile 'til the day is done.
'Til all is passed to gray.
Smile as you always can.
Smile 'til the coming day.

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This has some issues. Any help would be greatly appreciated.

Comments

Issues? What issues? I

Issues? What issues? I thought it was lovely! Keep up the good work!

Ariel | Fri, 09/18/2009

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very good!

It is a lovely poem, but there are just one or two things I noticed. It seems that some of the time you have a definite rhyme scheme and then you say something that doesn't work for it. And in the second stanza, the repeated word "tell" is a bit redundant...maybe you can find something else that rhymes with it or a different way of saying what you want to say. Besides that I can't think of anything wrong with it. It really is a very good poem. :-D

KatieSara | Sat, 09/19/2009

Katie:-)

"Are all humans like this? So much bigger on the inside?"
-Idris/TARDIS

Very well done, good job!

Very well done, good job!

Kendra | Sat, 09/19/2009

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Katiesara-Yes. Those are the

Katiesara-Yes. Those are the problems I'm having. When I wrote this I couldn't think of anything; and when I got back to it, I was in a different frame of mind, so nothing seemed to fit. Thanks
OGF- Thank you
Kendra--Glad you liked it.

airlia | Sat, 09/19/2009

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