Elemental

A Poem By AmandaMR // 2/28/2018

Shrouded is the moon tonight,
The starlight bides its time;
A solitary bat takes flight,
Seeking better clime.

The trees, they shiver restlessly
Awaiting things unknown.
The grasses ripple fitfully;
Earth shudders to her bone.

No cricket song, no croaking frog,
The night bird's call is still;
The very dark enwrapped by fog,
Subject to darker will.

A heavy stillness mutes the air,
The wind now holds its breath;
An unseen power~fey or fair?~
Has forced it still as death.

Sudden flashes tear the sky,
Yet, silence reigning still,
Thunder can give no reply
The painful void to fill.

Streak by streak the Lightning twists,
Furious at the rebuff.
Powerfully the dark resists
"Til Night has had enough.

A crash of Thunder breaks the chain
To join his comrade light,
Together bringing sheeting Rain
To batter down the Night.

The spell cast off, the Wind brings now
Her force to add in turn;
Night's force beats back, it will not cow,
It threatens to return.

The four unlikely allies strain
Against the foe's dark might;
Thunder, Lightning, Wind, and Rain
Combat the force of Night.

"Til finally battle finds its end
With black Night's sudden fall;
The dark, no strength to still contend,
Gives up its hold on all.

The Wind subsides, the Thunder dies,
The Lightning hides her face;
Only Rain will now remain
All war wounds to erase.

Sunrise then breaks forth at last,
Dissipating mist.
The nightly struggle now is past,
The elements at rest.

Yet Earth reserves her strength as yet,
Gathering force in turn;
The others spent, she won't forget,
But waits for Night's return.

Comments

This is absolutely exquisite.

This is absolutely exquisite. Your imagery is lovely, and the rhythm is precise. A very pleasing read.
As irony would have it, there is a storm raging outide my window, so it was very easy to enter into the emotion behind your words. Well done!

Damaris Ann | Thu, 03/01/2018

God uses the milestones as stepping stones to bring us closer to Him. We may not see it in the moment, but we can always look back and see the memorials of His love in the crumbles of our stumbling blocks.

WOW. Just WOW. The rhyming

WOW. Just WOW.
The rhyming scheme was so pleasant to read, and your word choice is so perfect! I truly felt the thunder in my chest and felt the rain on my face. I loved it so much!

Madalyn Clare | Fri, 03/02/2018

"To live is to love with the passion of a thousand stars. To love is to live despite the pain of a thousand scars. Anything in between is a passing shadow." ~Michael Joseph Murano

This was so lovely and

This was so lovely and wonderful. :)

Libby | Sat, 03/03/2018

“The gospel alone is the power of God unto salvation.
Therefore, suffer, yes. Be misunderstood, yes. Be shamed, yes. But do not be ashamed. For the joy set before you, take up your cross, follow Jesus, be shamed and despise the shame!" -- John Piper

Thanks so much! I love that

Thanks so much! I love that it lined up with an actual storm; it's always amazing when literary life and real life collide.

AmandaMR | Thu, 03/08/2018

"Come, travel with me in dreams far, far beyond the range of the possible and the known." ~Charles Baudelaire

Thank you! :)

Thank you! :)

AmandaMR | Thu, 03/08/2018

"Come, travel with me in dreams far, far beyond the range of the possible and the known." ~Charles Baudelaire

Thanks! I'm glad it was able

Thanks! I'm glad it was able to spark some of that same feeling in someone else too.

AmandaMR | Thu, 03/08/2018

"Come, travel with me in dreams far, far beyond the range of the possible and the known." ~Charles Baudelaire

I like the quiet, then wild

I like the quiet, then wild spirit of this. :)

Hannah D. | Fri, 03/09/2018

"Reason itself is a matter of faith. It is an act of faith to assert that our thoughts have any relation to reality at all." - G. K. Chesterton

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