love one part onions

A Poem By Anna // 4/29/2013

onions
come gift-wrapped in gossamer gauze
and split into spirals of pearl

you
wear a raven rag worn to feather-down
and bury unplumbed depths of body beneath

love
is shaped of (one) the yearning for you
and (two) the ambition to act well by you

one
I will rather hold soft than shiny
I will rather taste sweet than sour

two
you grow deeper than any root
and I, a storyteller, garden souls

I
(three) still fear to rip apart never grasping
what first desires or second requires

three
you and onions can both cause crying
oh, what to do with your ability to cry back

grace
is the last and best part of love
because it can cover the third

Comments

Wow. I could never paint such

Wow. I could never paint such pictures.

I admit that I have thought that your most rrecent writings were really strange and confusing for me…and after reading this once, I thought this was just another. But then I read it again. And again. And again. Probably five times.

You know what, Anna? Lately your writings have been so mysterious. You don't tell so much. And once I understand it, I love it. There are so many things to uncover in this poem. This has stretched my brain; so much, I congratulate you.

The numbers and stuff were confusing at first, but I think if you told us everything, this would have lost its quality and specialness. This was like piecing together a puzzle. I think poems should be deep and so the reader has to really understand it. And this is one of the first I've read in a long, long time. Onions and tearing and…amazing, Anna.

I feel like you still feel like no one understands you when what came out of you was supposed to sound better and it didn't so people took it he wrong way...and you are the one that should be able to express better - you are the writer…so whether you still feel the same or no, I am still praying. Cause it's not only you who's felt that way before.

Oh. I absolutely love your new picture!

Lucy Anne | Mon, 04/29/2013

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson

This is obscurely beautiful

This is obscurely beautiful to me for some reason. I don't completely understand it, but at the same time I understand the mood. This was my favorite:

love
is shaped of (one) the yearning for you
and (two) the ambition to act well by you

I also loved the part about onions causing crying, as well as the anonymous "you" causing crying. It was just so interesting. I hope that you continue to post these obscure pieces, because they are some of my favorites to read.

Erin | Tue, 04/30/2013

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

:)

All of it is beautiful, but the last two stanzas are especially striking.

Kyleigh | Tue, 04/30/2013

Wow... I agree with Kyleigh.

Wow...

I agree with Kyleigh. Keep posting, please!

three
you and onions can both cause crying
oh, what to do with your ability to cry back

That last line...

I'm always amazed by people's ability to turn stanzas completely around with just a few words. And I feel like you did that. I just love the: oh, what to do with your ability to cry back Seriously, so, so much. Like, enough to add it to all the odd quotes/words on my bedroom wall. It's such a striking line!

and bury unplumbed depths of body beneath

Once again--another completely beautiful line! I don't know how you do this, seriously.

And the end; I just adored it.

Sorry this is so filled with adjectives. I have nothing to critique. Honestly, it's perfect. You tell a story in numbers and onions, and that in itself is amazing. :)

One of your best yet.

Madeline | Tue, 04/30/2013

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

Fabulous!

This is really, really, really great! I have so many favorite lines in this.
But I think these are my utmost favorites:

love
is shaped of (one) the yearning for you
and (two) the ambition to act well by you

one
I will rather hold soft than shiny
I will rather taste sweet than sour

Very awesome! I always love reading your poetry! Please post more soon!

Kassady | Tue, 04/30/2013

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
---
Write On!

like, seriously good

Wow, I haven't been on AP in ages and then I pop in just in time to read this... I love the pace, slow and thoughtful; the lovely words that are (how to say it?) taste-able, if that makes sense. Also, the alliteration and rhyming of certain words is understated and cool.

My favorite bit was: "you / wear a raven rag worn to feather-down" but it was all fab. Definitely worth reading several times not just to fully understand but also to fully appreciate.

Hannah W. | Thu, 05/02/2013

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