Looking Back

A Poem By Brighid // 1/13/2016

By my side is a beautiful man
Around my finger a tiny hand
Time is slipping away like sand
I realize it looking back

Crayon sketches on the bathroom door
Lego pieces on the floor
I never thought I could take much more
But now I am looking back

Heavy breathing, gentle sighs
Fluttering lashes and tired eyes
Soft whispers and lullabies
I feel it when looking back

Now they’re gone
Flown away
I close my eyes again today
And smile while looking back

Comments

Lovely

This is very beautiful!
Your first attempt makes mine look very bad. :P
I love the imagery you used. My only critique is that the last verse is a bit shorter than the others, which makes the rhythm a little bit off. Other than that it's perfect! I hope you write more poetry in the future.

Damaris Ann | Wed, 01/13/2016

My thoughts are not your thoughts, neither are your ways my ways, saith the Lord. For as the heavens are higher than the earth, so are my ways higher than your ways, and my thoughts than your thoughts.
‭‭Isaiah‬ ‭55:8-9‬

I'm commenting again because

I'm commenting again because I sent your poem to my sister and she said this:
"Love it. And I think the rhythm is PERFECT. ;). Because the last verse is a gentle ending :).
Thanks for sharing!"
Thought you might like to see that. :)

Damaris Ann | Wed, 01/13/2016

My thoughts are not your thoughts, neither are your ways my ways, saith the Lord. For as the heavens are higher than the earth, so are my ways higher than your ways, and my thoughts than your thoughts.
‭‭Isaiah‬ ‭55:8-9‬

Wow!

Thanks for sharing that, Damaris! That was really cool to see :) thanks for commenting

Brighid | Wed, 01/13/2016

When I worship, I would rather my heart be without words than my words be without heart.

You're more than welcome. :)

You're more than welcome. :) I know how much I love comments (they make my day!) so I knew it would make you happy. :)

Damaris Ann | Wed, 01/13/2016

My thoughts are not your thoughts, neither are your ways my ways, saith the Lord. For as the heavens are higher than the earth, so are my ways higher than your ways, and my thoughts than your thoughts.
‭‭Isaiah‬ ‭55:8-9‬

Genius minds think alike ;)

Well, thanks for thinking of me :) what made you think to send it to your sister? Cause that little fact means a lot to me in itself!

Brighid | Wed, 01/13/2016

When I worship, I would rather my heart be without words than my words be without heart.

My sister is a mommy and she

My sister is a mommy and she has just one little boy right now. We are always talking about how we should be content with what God has blessed us with right now instead of wishing for more.
I actually liked the poem enough to read it multiple times to myself and then read it out loud to Momma. :) She liked it and suggested that I send it to my sister. :)

Damaris Ann | Wed, 01/13/2016

My thoughts are not your thoughts, neither are your ways my ways, saith the Lord. For as the heavens are higher than the earth, so are my ways higher than your ways, and my thoughts than your thoughts.
‭‭Isaiah‬ ‭55:8-9‬

Awww

That's so sweet! Tell your sister thank you for her lovely comment and for embracing the challenging and utterly under appreciated life of motherhood. It's a beautiful thing. God bless you and your family!

Brighid | Wed, 01/13/2016

When I worship, I would rather my heart be without words than my words be without heart.

Thank you! I will definitely

Thank you! I will definitely tell her. :)

Damaris Ann | Wed, 01/13/2016

My thoughts are not your thoughts, neither are your ways my ways, saith the Lord. For as the heavens are higher than the earth, so are my ways higher than your ways, and my thoughts than your thoughts.
‭‭Isaiah‬ ‭55:8-9‬

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