Insomnia

A Poem By Damaris Ann // 8/14/2016

Crickets and fans sound in my ear
I wait for dawn's rays to appear
But pain cannot be kept at bay
I try to push the fog away
And onwards through the haze I see
That sleep may make its way to me
And then the beast draws near again
Insomnia is labeled "sin"
It's dreaded force to me denies
Blessed sleep and still it decries
That I must be awake at night
While rest is scared away by sight

Comments

The rhyme and rhythm really

The rhyme and rhythm really amplify the sentiment expressed - nicely done!

Hannah D. | Fri, 08/19/2016

"Reason itself is a matter of faith. It is an act of faith to assert that our thoughts have any relation to reality at all." - G. K. Chesterton

You definitely made me feel

You definitely made me feel the emotions in this strongly....well done. And I think anyone would sympathize with you. :(

(Also, this is content-commentary and not on the writing itself-- but insomnia labeled as a sin?? Oh my goodness, that seems so not right to me. Anyway, just had to throw out my indignation there. :D )

Sarah Bethany | Fri, 08/19/2016

Lol I was a little surprised

Lol I was a little surprised at that too! But does it just express frustration at the insomnia it self, like calling it names or something? : P I don't know!

Hannah D. | Fri, 08/19/2016

"Reason itself is a matter of faith. It is an act of faith to assert that our thoughts have any relation to reality at all." - G. K. Chesterton

:)

That was more an expression of frustration towards insomnia. :) I don't think that insomnia is literally sin. :P

Thanks for your lovely comments!

Damaris Ann | Fri, 08/19/2016

"It is the small temptations which undermine integrity unless we watch and pray and never think them too trivial to be resisted."
-Luisa May Alcott

Ohhhhhh, that makes more

Ohhhhhh, that makes more sense to me now hahahahaha. I was a little nervous for a second that some people were saying insomnia was a sin, and I just had to protest hahaha. But now I get it ;)

Sarah Bethany | Mon, 08/22/2016

I like this :)

I like this :)

Maddi | Fri, 08/26/2016

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

I like this, the rhyming is

I like this, the rhyming is really intriguing:)

Mikaela Grace | Sun, 08/28/2016

Do Justice//Love Mercy//Walk Humbly

Thank you, Maddi and Mikki!!

Thank you, Maddi and Mikki!!

Damaris Ann | Mon, 08/29/2016

"It is the small temptations which undermine integrity unless we watch and pray and never think them too trivial to be resisted."
-Luisa May Alcott

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