Maybe (revised)

Fiction By Damaris Ann // 2/18/2019

Removed for magazine entry...keeping my fingers crossed!!
-Damaris Ann

Comments

Aww, I like this story! It's

Aww, I like this story! It's so sweet! Well done! My only suggestion would be to remove the "He said" at the very end, so that it more closely matches the format when she said "Maybe". Other than that, though, I love it. I especially liked it when you listed all the activities they did together and when you ended with another "Maybe". This is such a beautiful, sweet story.

Grace J. | Mon, 02/18/2019

“You are doing something great with your life—when you are doing all the small things with His great love.” - Ann Voskamp

<3

Thank you so much, Grace!! I like your suggestion. It is much more satisfying without the “He said” at the end. Thanks again! Your comment made me smile.

Damaris Ann | Tue, 02/19/2019

I don’t thrive off of chaos: chaos thrives off of me.

*Tears*

I. Love. This. Short story romances can be so hard to put together while establishing satisfying characters and relationships but I felt them grow through this wonderful story and I just really really love it :) Well done!!!

Brighid | Tue, 02/19/2019

When I worship, I would rather my heart be without words than my words be without heart.

<3

Thank you so much! That’s so sweet. I feel humbled.

Damaris Ann | Tue, 02/19/2019

I don’t thrive off of chaos: chaos thrives off of me.

*gasp* YAYY!!

Yes!! Good luck!!

Heather Jones | Tue, 02/19/2019

“planting seeds inevitably changes my feelings about rain.” —luci shaw.
psalm 84:10 esv.

Aww I like the new ending so

Aww I like the new ending so much! (I saw the new ending before you removed it, I had been meaning to comment on it but hadn't yet.) I would love to see more!

p.s. So excited for you! Hope you get published! :D

Joy J. | Tue, 02/19/2019

C.H. Spurgeon - "God’s mercy is so great that you may sooner drain the sea of its water, or deprive the sun of its light, or make space too narrow, than diminish the great mercy of God. "

Thank you so much!! If it

Thank you so much!! If it doesn’t end up getting published I’ll probably add a bit to it.

Damaris Ann | Wed, 02/20/2019

I don’t thrive off of chaos: chaos thrives off of me.

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