Well Hey

A Poem By Damaris Ann // 12/29/2016

Tic tac
Jaw slack
Got that cherry red lip smack
Back packin' out back

Old hick
With this chick
I'll park for you to see the view
And no, girl, I ain't eyein' you

Sun's low
Home slow
Keep a fellow on his toes
Hit the trail to keep it close

Corvette
You bet
It's time to detour; take a ride
I'm proud to have you by my side

Sweet tea
You and me
Your smile is a sight to see
Pink cheeks no cheat

Well hey
Okay
I guess you really have to say
This has been a southern day

Comments

This is SO CUTE. There's a

This is SO CUTE. There's a sassiness to it that I love. It screams "country", and your style and flair you've put in it are fantastic. Only one critique: And no girl I ain't eyein' you

That line was a little unclear to me, because I think it needs punctuation. At first I thought you were saying "no girl" as in "there's no girl" but then when you followed it with the last half I understood, but it's a little unclear.

And no, girl, I ain't eyein' you

I think that will really clear it up! You did a fantastic job; this is adorable! Merry, merry Christmas to you!

Madeline | Thu, 12/29/2016

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

Aww thank you so much!!!

Aww thank you so much!!! You're so sweet.

Ooh, yes. I'll fix that right now. :) thanks for pointing that out!

Damaris Ann | Thu, 12/29/2016

"The lines and verses are only the outward garments of the poem and are no more really it than your ruffles and flounces are YOU. The real poem is the soul within them . . . and that beautiful bit is the soul of an unwritten poem. It is not every day one

OKAY I CAN'T WRITE A POEM

OKAY I CAN'T WRITE A POEM LIKE THIS ONE!!!!!!!!! HOW DO YOU DO IT?! I LOVE THIS BOUNCE IN THE RHYTHM!!!!!

With that overwith, somebody make this into a song! It's so cute and I love your rhyme scheme!

Madalyn Clare | Thu, 12/29/2016

"To live is to love with the passion of a thousand stars. To love is to live despite the pain of a thousand scars. Anything in between is a passing shadow." ~Michael Joseph Murano

I DON'T EVEN KNOW!!! XD But

I DON'T EVEN KNOW!!!

XD But thank you. :) Keep writing!! Your own poetry is sooooooo charming! And you're so sweet. Thank you again. :)

Damaris Ann | Thu, 12/29/2016

"The lines and verses are only the outward garments of the poem and are no more really it than your ruffles and flounces are YOU. The real poem is the soul within them . . . and that beautiful bit is the soul of an unwritten poem. It is not every day one

This is so much fun, I really

This is so much fun, I really enjoyed the best of it! Well done!

Kassady | Sat, 12/31/2016

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
---
Write On!

Aww thank you, Kass! I

Aww thank you, Kass! I appreciate it.

Damaris Ann | Sat, 12/31/2016

"The lines and verses are only the outward garments of the poem and are no more really it than your ruffles and flounces are YOU. The real poem is the soul within them . . . and that beautiful bit is the soul of an unwritten poem. It is not every day one

The rhythm and wording of

The rhythm and wording of this is adorable. I love it. : )

Hannah D. | Mon, 01/02/2017

"Reason itself is a matter of faith. It is an act of faith to assert that our thoughts have any relation to reality at all." - G. K. Chesterton

Aww thank you!

Aww thank you!

Damaris Ann | Mon, 01/02/2017

"The lines and verses are only the outward garments of the poem and are no more really it than your ruffles and flounces are YOU. The real poem is the soul within them . . . and that beautiful bit is the soul of an unwritten poem. It is not every day one

Ahhh I love this so much! I

Ahhh I love this so much! I can almost hear it with a bluegrassish guitar, and maybe a fiddle.

Sarah Liz | Wed, 01/11/2017

"Knowledge is knowing that a tomato is a fruit; wisdom is not putting it in a fruit salad." ~ Anonymous

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