Dream On: Sky Screen Log 3

Fiction By Elizabeth Anne // 6/28/2012

#3 December 31, 2020 11:10 p.m. I have been working late at night recently to upgrade the Dream Machine. I have made much money off of my design, but it is still flawed, for now. I have recently been working on making it perfect, so that no one will ever die in a coma again. Why the change of heart, you might ask? Well there isn’t one. I feel the same, I hate that everyone lives because of me, but my mother died. I hate life. I hate everyone. Still, I can’t turn down a bit of money. Or in this case, a lot. Millions, in fact. They say that the Dream Machine is revolutionary, and I am being hailed as a hero from every person in the country. Besides that, I have recently been contacted by other countries as well. Before long, I will be known across every continent, every island, and every ice flow. I no longer feel like god, I am god. I can do whatever I wish, whenever I want. I could buy an island, a mansion, an office, and a pool without putting a dent in my wallet. In fact, I have bought all of those, and more. Before long I will own the world.

Comments

Hmm...at least some things

Hmm...at least some things are getting cleared up now. I like the Sky Screen idea alot.

Well, post more! :)

Lucy Anne | Thu, 07/05/2012

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson

Thanks! I will post more

Thanks! I will post more soon. :)

Elizabeth Anne | Thu, 07/05/2012

See him with his books:
Tree beside the brooks,
Drinking at the root
Till the branch bear fruit.
See him with his pen:
Written line, and then,
Better thought preferred,
Deep from in the Word.
~John Piper

Son of a two-headed greed

Son of a two-headed greed monster, this one. I can't wait to see what happens to him. I mean that in the best possible way, of course. ^.^

Anna | Wed, 08/01/2012

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

Hmm

The wallet comment seems a bit out of character, and, though it seems like I'm looking for things to find wrong I'm actually enjoying this tale and can't wait to see what you do with it.
(back to nitpicking) If I may make so bold as to suggest a new name for the skyscreens: Aural Planar Projectors. Not to intrude on creativity, but skyscreen sounds a bit cliché to go in a wonderful story such as this.
Feel perfectly free to disregard me (my friends do it all the time), but please write more.

P.S. I feel slightly less inclined to sympathize with Drames now.

Aalen Fideli | Mon, 08/13/2012

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Oh, believe me, it gets

@Anna- Oh, believe me, it gets worse, or better, I can't tell which... :) I'm toying with the next sky screen log though, I feel like its too much of a repetition. I think I made his background too simple when I came up with Drame's character, and I think I need some other twist to make these sky screen logs work. Any ideas?

Elizabeth Anne | Sun, 08/19/2012

See him with his books:
Tree beside the brooks,
Drinking at the root
Till the branch bear fruit.
See him with his pen:
Written line, and then,
Better thought preferred,
Deep from in the Word.
~John Piper

@Aalen Fideli- Thanks for

@Aalen Fideli- Thanks for all of your input! If it seems like I'm ignoring you, I'm not. I only just got back from working at a camp in Michigan, so I have just read your comments. I really appreciate all of your ideas.

Thanks for the suggestion on the new name for the sky screen logs. I see what you're saying, about the name being kind of cliche. I like your name, but I'm not quite sure it works, because I'm trying to make this story seem as similar to this world as possible, so that it seems like it is reasonable for it to be so close to our time, and your name sounds kind of too far in the future. Its a great name, and I really like it, but I think I'll have to think about it more before I use it, or come up with another. Thank you so much for that suggestion though, and I really do like it, I just don't feel like it fits.

PS I'm glad you don't like him, because you aren't supposed to... :) I wasn't sure that it would work though because I don't usually try to make people dislike my characters. :)

Elizabeth Anne | Sun, 08/19/2012

See him with his books:
Tree beside the brooks,
Drinking at the root
Till the branch bear fruit.
See him with his pen:
Written line, and then,
Better thought preferred,
Deep from in the Word.
~John Piper

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