The Apologetic Shrew

A Poem By Erin // 1/21/2014

I. Shrew
how much depends
on an apologetic
shrew
how much can you
say
how much can you
do

II. It's Complicated
airily, you said that
I had told you a lie
I have done no such thing
I said
you just rolled your eyes

III. Raindrops
raindrops are falling
on my head
they drip down
my hairline and
into my mouth and i
drink them up like
my favorite juice and i
smile because i
just tasted nature
as it was intended
maybe now i will be
more whole

Comments

I LOVE...

...number three! That's just how I feel, about drinking nature and the juice and the wholeness! You encapsulated a feeling really well. :)

Sarah Bethany | Tue, 01/21/2014

Raindrops I love. :)

Raindrops I love. :)

Lucy Anne | Tue, 01/21/2014

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson

Adore!!!

"Tots MaGoats Cra Cra Adores!" I say, like the commercial :P Seriously adore these! The rhythm of all three, and the wording... FAB! I really don't have a favorite, I love all three!

Kassady | Tue, 01/21/2014

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
---
Write On!

Thanks, everybody!

Thanks, everybody!

Erin | Wed, 01/22/2014

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

:)

Echoing Sarah Bethany... I LOVED the third one! It was perfect. :)

Kyleigh | Wed, 01/22/2014

I really liked It's

I really liked It's Complicated. That was probably my favorite. I practically broke the mouse (okay, I lied--it's a touchpad but it sounded good) clicking on these when I saw you had FINALLY POSTED AGAIN HORRAY!

Madeline | Thu, 01/23/2014

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

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Kassady | Fri, 01/24/2014

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
---
Write On!

Cool! I was like 99.9% sure

Cool! I was like 99.9% sure it was you :)

Erin | Fri, 01/24/2014

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

:)

So I've been literally the worst at commenting lately, but here I am! I actually liked the first one the best, the rhythm and wording fit together so perfectly, and I could just feel it come together, like, feel the words drop off my tongue. The others were lovely as well. And I'm so glad you posted!!

little woman | Sun, 01/26/2014

The most astonishing thing about miracles is that they happen.
-G. K. Chesterton

Soooooo late at commenting....

I liked all three! Raindrops painted good imagery, so that was nice.
But I actually enjoyed It's Complicated, it's got lovely rhythm and the last line is perfect. Shrew is good too.

Maddi | Wed, 01/29/2014

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

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