Goodbyes

A Poem By Erin // 10/20/2015

[this has been redacted for possible publication. I will repost if it doesn't get into the college lit mag.]

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Aww Erin that's so wonderful!

Aww Erin that's so wonderful! I'm so happy for you. Your poetry really is well-written.

Damaris Ann | Tue, 10/20/2015

"It is the small temptations which undermine integrity unless we watch and pray and never think them too trivial to be resisted."
-Luisa May Alcott

Ooooohh, PUBLISHED? DID

Ooooohh, PUBLISHED? DID SOMEONE SAY PUBLISHED?

"I have never
missed someone while
they were standing
right in front of me"

It hurts, doesn't it? When they're standing RIGHT in front of you?
I reckon it hurts more than missing them when they're not away, because it's not real, right there in front of you. Yeah. It hurts, I know that hurt.

"as you walk down the driveway
into your new life
without me"

That stung me. I've felt that, oh yes.
Really connected with this poem :) I really liked it.

Looking forward to fiction ;)

Maddi | Wed, 10/21/2015

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

AH AH AH AHH

Wait, didn't I have this reaction before?? -- I literally was saying "AH!" in my head whilst reading the first stanza. Black shirt, ash tree, everything. Erin, GORGEOUS! How do you write like this? You paint a picture in my head with such searing images. Thank you!! And I definitely know what it's like to miss someone right in front of me. I'm leaving friends behind in a few days, for who knows how long, so I may have my own melancholic poetry to churn out as well soon. ;)

Sarah Bethany | Wed, 10/21/2015

Oooh, on at the same time as

Oooh, on at the same time as you, Sarah! ;)

Maddi | Wed, 10/21/2015

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

Wow Erin...this poem is so

Wow Erin...this poem is so vivid and you packed meaning into every word. I AM SO HAPPY for you that you are doing so well in college! It must be so much fun to write poetry for homework. And what your professor said?? you should really publish them in the magazine. :)

(It's amazing to see one of each writer on the front page!)

Lucy Anne | Wed, 10/21/2015

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson

Thanks, everyone! I

Thanks, everyone! I appreciate the influx of comments! My professor is wonderful and college has been an experience, for sure. I will be submitting all of the poems I wrote for the class to the literary magazine on campus. Actually, for the fiction portion of the class, I asked my professor if I could use the novella I've been working on (I have part of it posted on here...not sure if anyone remembers Thursdays?). I will certainly post the second half once it's completed!

Erin | Wed, 10/21/2015

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

Maddi, I think that's because

Maddi, I think that's because you & I are closer to each other's time zones in the world....maybe?? :D (am in Europe)

Sarah Bethany | Wed, 10/21/2015

It must be...not sure haha!

It must be...not sure haha!

And Erin, of course I remember Thursdays! I'd love to read more of that....the plot was interesting :)

Maddi | Wed, 10/21/2015

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

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