How You Left (revised)

A Poem By Erin // 6/5/2014

I.
How you tilted your head skyward
and the sun filtered
over your freckles
I've never had such a
beautiful day.

II.
How I have loved you
with every step you have taken
even when the breathing
got to be too much for you
How I have forgiven you
when you have brought me down
with your tight jaw and sometimes
self involved disposition
How I have missed all the good days
but they are gone and we won't
get them back
that's okay.

III.
How you left
leaving me wanting all of the
seconds
minutes
hours
back
I am sorry
if I ever let you down
if you ever felt lost and
I couldn't guide you
if you ever needed someone and
I wasn't enough
I am sorry
I never knew you like
I wanted to
I am sorry
that what I am saying is
selfish
childish
you never cared
I don't think
about silly ulterior motives
you were far too good for that
but this is my way of
making peace with
what has happened
what is irreparable
and final
and there isn't
a way for me to
fully process what
death is
without at least
writing about it
imagining all of the
ridiculous possibilities
that never could have
been anything anyway
I miss you
that's one thing I can
process, please
have your peace and
give me some too.

Comments

I loved them!! They were all

I loved them!! They were all so amazing, and they fell together so nicely...bittersweet and wonderful and ahh, I loved them all!

Flying Past Clouds | Sun, 06/08/2014

I love the first one. My

I love the first one. My gracious. It's just so lovely. The wording and the phrasing and just everything....That may actually be my favorite poem of yours ever. :) The second one, too. I can relate to the last couple of lines, but these were my absolute favorite: How I have forgiven you/when you have brought me down/with your tight jaw and sometimes/self involved disposition Just wow. The wording is so simple but manages to emote with complexity. And the last one is just really sad.

These were fantastic, Erin. Some of your best yet.

(P.S. Off the subject, but have you been hearing the new songs from Lana Del Rey?? What do you think? Not sure if I love it yet or not. Haha. I probably will)

Madeline | Sun, 06/08/2014

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

Wow, thanks, y'all! I'm glad

Wow, thanks, y'all! I'm glad you both liked them so much. Homey: yes, I have been and they're actually some of my favorite things she's done! Have you heard Brooklyn Baby? IT'S SO GOOD. I'm beyond pumped for the album:) btw I ADORE your quote.

Erin | Sun, 06/08/2014

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

Deep!

Erin, you're poetry is always so profoundly deep. Every line is wrought with emotions that run as deep as the oceans. I love your poetry, everything about it. It's so complicated yet so simplistic! I can't think of anything I don't like about it!
I loved how these three were separate, but still flowed together into one story, one poem.
The last one was sad, and tugged at my heart, and probably my favorite of the batch.
Love! Love! Love!

Kassady | Sun, 06/08/2014

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
---
Write On!

Wow, thank you so much!

Wow, thank you so much!

Erin | Mon, 06/09/2014

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

You're welcome! And haha, I

You're welcome! And haha, I think so now, too! I listened to the new ones a bunch yesterday and I think I like Brooklyn Baby best. "They say I'm too young to love you..." <3 I just love her lyrics! And thanks for the quote. :) That was my latest song obsession. Esp the version she did live on (I think) a Spanish show. It was amazing! Anyway--

Again, off subject, but did you ever see FIOS? I figured you'd be one of the first. :) I haven't yet but I think I want to, although everybody whose seen it so far says they cried. :(

Madeline | Mon, 06/09/2014

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

I saw it on Saturday night! I

I saw it on Saturday night! I bawled my eyes out for the last 40 minutes lol. They did a good job-they had to cut out some parts that I liked, but other than that they did a great job adapting it from the book! Shailene Woodley was great as Hazel.

Erin | Mon, 06/09/2014

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

haha! I'm going to see it

haha! I'm going to see it eventually. I don't usually cry during movies, so we'll see....it takes a lot. :) (actually, I don't think I've ever cried at a move, although that's probably TMI. haha)

Madeline | Mon, 06/09/2014

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

Lol, yeah, I'm a big movie

Lol, yeah, I'm a big movie crier. Like, I don't cry about things that actually happen to me, but I melt during movies and books. It's really good though. Ansel Elgort was good as Gus, but nobody can live up to Augustus Waters from the book. Shailene Woodley was SOOO good as Hazel though. Nat Wolff was probably the best as Isaac though. He was really funny!

Erin | Mon, 06/09/2014

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

!

Wow, Erin! I love love the last one! So good. The first was lovely imagery. I liked the second too, but just not so much as the third. So beautiful! I think you've out done yourself just a bit :P

Maddi | Tue, 06/10/2014

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

Thank you!!!! I really

Thank you!!!! I really appreciate it!

Erin | Tue, 06/10/2014

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

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