Ideas and Thoughts 63-66

Fiction By Erin // 4/7/2011

*A/N* These first two-Goddess of the Sea and The Doctor- I think could turn into something a little bit more elaborate. What to you all think? The others are just kind of random, spur of the moment type things.

63-Goddess of the Sea
“It was only a tear. But it was a tear that was crucial to my mother and father’s dangerous puzzle, map and plan. It was ridden with the pain and agony of a love lost, so close but yet so far apart. The tear was a thousand colors that are nonexistent today, a silver and blue and purple and yellow and green and so much more all at once. It trickled past my mother and settled itself not too far from her, seemingly calm and complacent.
            The tear was me. I am the sea, and this is my story.”
 
            64-The Doctor
“In the doctor’s lab there is a jar. In it contains a heart, a woman’s heart. He watches it each day for hours on end. When patients come in, he does his work but scarcely keeps his eyes off it. They are calculating, observant, watchful. But in them too is something that only the most careful see. The pain, the longing that resides in only the deepest depths of those stark green eyes. Some wonder if he killed the bearer of the heart. Others think he loved the woman who held it. Some believe that she tore it from her chest and left it there, and that she still roamed the land , heartless and cold. None are true, however.”
 
            65-Pointless Freewriting
“Cross legged sitting still typing computer hearts love love twisted supporters cabinet writing stupidly stretch down up hand on bar present calculator freewriting point .”
 
            66-Deaf Girl
“Lia liked watching shadows very much. She gave them names such as Vima and Karto and Yazah and played with their different shapes, manipulated the sun to her advantage. The other village children watched her reproachfully, unsure what to make of her. Lia didn’t mind. She couldn’t hear anyway.”

 

Comments

Hi

"The Doctor" needs a new title...maybe "the heart jar?"

Julie | Thu, 04/07/2011

Formerly Kestrel

I'll keep that in mind for

I'll keep that in mind for sure!

Erin | Fri, 04/08/2011

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

THE DOCTOR

Oh my--you must must must follow up on "The Doctor!" I think it's the perfect title! :))

Madeline | Fri, 04/08/2011

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

3-4-6

Those are the ones I want to see made into longer stories. I agree though 4 should be the Jar Heart or something similar.  Becuase just calling it the Doctor reminds me of Doctor Who. Rabbling could also make a good story if something happened

Micheala | Tue, 04/12/2011

I agree on "The

I agree on "The Doctor"/Doctor Who thing... But I will be reading the follow-up you posted!

Anna | Wed, 04/13/2011

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

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