Overexposed/Wild

A Poem By Erin // 3/14/2014

I. Overexposed
Lying exposed in the fluorescent box
Surgical paper crinkles against my back
Impersonal hands press soft tissue
Those intimate parts of me no one is supposed to touch
Inhale, she says, I breathe in hand sanitizer aroma
Exhale, she says, I breathe out the sterile remains
Removes the ice metal from my ribs, the signal of the end
Put on my shirt and I'm no longer a lab specimen
They call a "patient".

II. Wild
its own blue quiet
up sky high
violet shadows sweep
down to a bottomless grassy floor
pines climb sideways
take their own way up the rocks
pavement feels foreign here
in a place with no cars
its own blue quiet
only a mountaintop can provide.

Comments

:)

I love both of these so much.

Kyleigh | Fri, 03/14/2014

:)

These are really really good, Erin! I love both of these! They are so good! :) Love them!

Lucy Anne | Fri, 03/14/2014

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson

Love!

Love!!! Both are wonderfully vivid and well worded!!! More?

Kassady | Fri, 03/14/2014

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!

Thanks, y'all! <3

Thanks, y'all! <3

Erin | Sat, 03/15/2014

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

So vivid and intense, and the

So vivid and intense, and the first one is painful... You captured the invasion and "over-exposure" well: I actually winced. The second one is going perfectly with the "Wuthering Heights" soundtrack I'm listening to!

Sarah Bethany | Mon, 03/17/2014

I really like "Wild" . . .

I really like "Wild" . . . it's such a familiar feeling for me and you captured it beautifully. And "Overexposed" made me cringe with its robotic apathy. The images in both evoke a lot of feeling.

Hannah D. | Mon, 03/17/2014

"Reason itself is a matter of faith. It is an act of faith to assert that our thoughts have any relation to reality at all." - G. K. Chesterton

Thank you so much you guys!

Thank you so much you guys!

Erin | Mon, 03/17/2014

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

Great job, Erin!

Ditto to Sarah Bethany. I think these are some of your best. I got chills reading Overexposed. And I just loved Wild too.

Maddi | Tue, 03/18/2014

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

Thank you!!!

Thank you!!!

Erin | Tue, 03/18/2014

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

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