Forever

A Poem By Gina I. // 2/15/2017

Forever is what we promise
Forever is how we'll stay
No matter what tries to harm us
Nothing will keep us away
Forever is what keeps us young
But our time together is never long
As forever slips through our hands
Like infinite grains of sand
Soon we must learn to say goodbye
As the sun falls from the proverbial sky
And the stars loose their grip on space
We each will find our rightful place

As forever ends, right on time

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This is beatiful, Gina, and

This is beatiful, Gina, and well-done. That last line sums it up to perfection.

Damaris Ann | Fri, 02/17/2017

"It is the small temptations which undermine integrity unless we watch and pray and never think them too trivial to be resisted."
-Luisa May Alcott

Thank you!

I actually wanted to put something in between the last two lines, but I couldn't think what, so I just left it blank, and I think I prefer it that way.

Gina I. | Fri, 02/17/2017

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I think it's perfect how it

I think it's perfect how it is. :)

Damaris Ann | Fri, 02/17/2017

"It is the small temptations which undermine integrity unless we watch and pray and never think them too trivial to be resisted."
-Luisa May Alcott

Oh, that last line is

Oh, that last line is perfection! The flow of this poem is really well paced, and I love your wording. Bravo!

Madalyn Clare | Fri, 02/17/2017

"To live is to love with the passion of a thousand stars. To love is to live despite the pain of a thousand scars. Anything in between is a passing shadow." ~Michael Joseph Murano

Just want to say... You did a

Just want to say...
You did a lovely job writing this. I really like this. The flow, and the forever. How you repeated it and wasn't predictable -- you surprised and impressed me.
It reminded me of a friendship, and going through change - it had the perfect rhythm (especially with how "proverbial sky" was put) that fit with the mood.
Loved the last few lines:
"And the stars loose their grip on space
We each will find our rightful place

As forever ends, right on time"

--meaning how the world may fall apart, but it will still be in God's time...and that last line--"right on time"was the best way you could end this.

Just reading this poem brings so many different memories in my own life--and that's what I like the most about it.
This is a wonderful poem.

Lucy Anne | Fri, 02/17/2017

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson

Thank you all

Your comments make me feel so special. ^_^

Gina I. | Sat, 02/18/2017

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