Just Begun

A Poem By Hannah W. // 10/16/2009

The dreaming, it was the start
the first beat of an unbroken heart
it was like we had
never been apart

My dearest, are you sleeping?

We are dreams and we are dreaming
we are sunlight, we are streaming
we are the fire,
skyward leaping

Oh my dearest, are you sleeping?

We are waking, it is dawn
the earth is shaking, see it yawn
its first breath is yet
to be drawn

My dearest, are you sleeping?

We are the dream and we are drifting
through the ocean sand is sifting
The birthsong to the skies is lifting
and we are waking, we are taking
our first breath…

Sleep no more, my sweetest one
turn your face to the blinding sun
this is the first morning and it’s only

just begun

Comments

Oh wow. I think this is one

Oh wow. I think this is one of your best yet, Hannah (of course, basically all of your poetic masterpieces are your best yet.). Wonderful.

Erin | Fri, 10/16/2009

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

I love this. I think my

I love this. I think my favorite line is we are the dream and we are drifting, through the ocean sand is sifting...it brings an image to my mind, of a beach nearby our house. There are flecks of some sort of shiny rock mixed with the sand there, and when it sifts through the ocean it looks as if the water were filled with glitter. And another favorite ( I like all of them, actually) is the chorus--my dearest, are you sleeping? It's like a lullaby in reverse. It's lovely.

Annabel | Fri, 10/16/2009

ooooh!!

This was soooo beautiful!!!! The whole flow of the poem was lovely!!! I loved it!!!!!!

Elizabeth | Fri, 10/16/2009

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The Holy Spirit is the quiet guest of our soul." -St. Augustine

Oh how positively beautiful.

Oh how positively beautiful. You're so good. This could be a classic, I think.

The Brit | Sat, 10/17/2009

*sigh*

Lovely, very lovely...Can I go quietly weep somewhere? LOL

LoriAnn | Sat, 10/17/2009

Amazing...I love this poem.

Amazing...I love this poem. It's so sweet with such great language...

Julie | Sat, 10/17/2009

Formerly Kestrel

!!!!!!!!!! :)

:) it's beautiful.

Bernadette | Sat, 10/17/2009

I adore this! VERY nice

I adore this! VERY nice job!!!

Emily | Sun, 10/18/2009

Ditto to everybody. ;)

Ditto to everybody. ;)

Clare Marie | Sun, 10/18/2009

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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]

RE: ditto to everybody

lol. I love this poem and my favorite lines are probably the last verse. Awesome poem Heather

Kay J Fields | Tue, 10/20/2009

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I wish I had read this

I wish I had read this sooner!

Anna | Tue, 10/20/2009

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

 Very nice! I like it a lot.

 Very nice! I like it a lot.

Timothy | Sun, 10/25/2009

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