Shalott: I & II

A Poem By Hannah W. // 12/26/2011

I.
a silent isle, a cold-clear river;
the weeks before another winter
sends frost to claim the barley.

four gray walls, and four gray towers;
within, she weaves thread into flowers
and rows of new-sown barley.

she sings a song which echoes clearly
to a reaper reaping early.

a bow-shot from her bower-eaves
the reaper labors, piling sheaves
while the weaver dreams of barley.

echoes nightly bear the weaver's song
across the river and among
the moonlit fields of barley.

and by the moon, the reaper weary
listens for his faceless fairy.

often through her mirror blue
she sees knights loyal, heroes true
but thinks instead of barley.

she spins her web, the half-sick weaver,
pretty shadows parading through her mirror,
past the fields of golden barley.

the aspens' veil dies and falls;
the reaper spies the four gray walls.

II.
the reaper's brow in sunlight glowed
beside the river as it flowed
between the isle and the barley.

brighter than a true knight's shield
flashed his scythe in the yellow field
as he cut through the barley.

she left her web, she left her loom
she looked beyond her tower room.

out flew her web, and floated wide
as she smashed the mirror side to side
and gazed upon the barley.

the fated weaver, down she came,
she found a boat and loosed the chain
and sailed toward a field of barley.

the curse came near; the bread stream bore
the weaver to the reaper's shore.

 

Comments

Words cannot accuaretly

Words cannot accuaretly express how much I love this. I don't know why but my favourite line is "She sings a song which echoes clearly to a reaper reaping early."

So lovely.

Tamerah | Tue, 12/27/2011

stunning

This is stunning, Hannah.... I loved the line about her smashing the mirror. Beautiful! This has great imagery! I absolutely loved it!

Elizabeth | Tue, 12/27/2011

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The Holy Spirit is the quiet guest of our soul." -St. Augustine

beautiful...

this is entirely awesome...I love all the lines about the reaper. Good job.

Bernadette | Wed, 12/28/2011

Quite incredible--I agree

Quite incredible--I agree with Elizabeth, the imagery was beautiful and the line about smashing the mirror was wonderful.

E | Wed, 12/28/2011

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

Gorgeous as always. I like

Gorgeous as always. I like how this is the Elaine of Tennyson (has he ever written anything better than The Lady of Shalott?) and Pyle and all the other lovely old Arthur-commemorators, but also your very own Elaine.

Annabel | Tue, 01/03/2012

Since they kind of covered it...

...I'll just add that the rhythm was also amazing.

Anna | Wed, 01/04/2012

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

The Lady of Shalott is my

The Lady of Shalott is my favorite poem of Tennyson's.  I love how you "weave" in pieces of the original in with your own work.  Wonderful salute to Tennyson.

Clare Marie | Mon, 01/09/2012

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