All Right/Shapes

A Poem By Madeline // 3/26/2014

All Right

Sweating profusely
Beaded lip
Leisurely work it out like
Pink saltwater taffy
You are incomprehensible to me
And intriguing
I think
As I lean across the divide
That we
As I wait to seize my time
Could be
You don't like me, then that's fine
Something
Or at least the start to it
All right?

Shapes

You are angles
I am
Curved lines
Together we make something right
Together we're the builders of
A fabulous lot of times
And there's always an ache that comes on
After your goodbye
Angles and
Curved lines
Completing shapes in the shape
Of life

Comments

Good!

Yay! More poetry! The first poem didn't make much sense to me... I would be interested to hear the backstory on these. I loved how abstract they were, though!
I love the second one! That one is perfect! Love the first four lines the best, but the whole poem is wonderful!
I loved the pink saltwater taffy line, even though it kind of threw me off... Like I said, backstory? Haha!
Well written! Would love to read more ;)

Kassady | Wed, 03/26/2014

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!

I really love both of these!

I really love both of these! I loved the images, they did a good job of conveying what you were trying to say, I think.
"Pink saltwater taffy". I love that, it brings up such a specific feeling.
Awesome job!!!

Erin | Thu, 04/03/2014

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

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