Deep Breaths

A Poem By Madeline // 10/23/2013

Take a deep breath
And ask yourself
Why do I really like him
I would be the envy
Of everyone
I would be the girl
He put his arm around
I would be laughing
All the time, every day
I would be chock full of
Hyped-up butterflies
I would be listening
To the sound of his voice
I would be loving
Every singular moment
Just because
And take a deep breath
Ask yourself
Now is that going to happen
Bite your lip
Close your eyes
Take a breath
No

Comments

Since I've already read Sarah Bethany's....

This was sweet.
"I would be chock full of
Hyped-up butterflies"

I really liked that line.

Write more fiction!!

Maddi | Wed, 10/23/2013

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

I liked this. I didn't feel

I liked this. I didn't feel quite as much emotion behind it as some other poems that you've written recently, but I still liked the way you worded everything!

Erin | Thu, 10/24/2013

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

Thanks, Maddi! And

Thanks, Maddi!

And Erin--yeah, I know what you mean. Read it over several times, just am not feeling it. LOL. :P I think the poetry bug is FINALLY LEAVING ME. Now you all can rejoice! haha

Madeline | Thu, 10/24/2013

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

Hmm!

Honestly, I liked this one a lot!!! AND I AM SUPER SAD TO HEAR THAT THE POETRY BUG IS WEARING OFF!
LOL! I laughed at your notes :P

Kassady | Thu, 10/24/2013

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
---
Write On!

haha

Your note made me laugh... :D You're the best. And you can monopolize the homepage all you want... we love your stuff.

This was depressing, but in a good way - it made me feel all achey and longing. I want butterflies, too!! :P

Sarah Bethany | Sat, 10/26/2013

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