Red Pen

A Poem By Madeline // 4/2/2013

There he, there he goes
flitting 'cross the sky
red, bold-winged and beautiful
even cardinals die

What does the lone bird say
to the man who cannot hear
bird sits among the others singing
but the song evades man's ears

Dare he try to make a wave
his colors still the eyes
faces press to glass panes firm
even cardinals die

Reaching man is not a job
bird's lost all gravity
playing fair is no concern
bird needs no legacy

And then beneath the oak tree lay
a lone bird stilled of flight
red, bold-winged and beautiful
even cardinals die

Comments

I personally...

I personally loved it!!! It was confusing, the meaning was. Haha, so I was really happy to read your explanation! But it was really well worded, loved it! I don't think I've ever seen a dead cardinal! You are so right!

Kassady | Tue, 04/02/2013

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
---
Write On!

:) You are so funny. Thank

:) You are so funny. Thank you for those notes. I never realized that cardinals do die. They ARE so beautiful.

Lucy Anne | Tue, 04/02/2013

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson

I love it. This part: "Dare

I love it. This part:

"Dare he try to make a wave
his colors still the eyes
faces press to glass panes firm
even cardinals die."

And this is my VERY favorite:

"What does the lone bird say
to the man who cannot hear
bird sits among the others singing
but the song evades man's ears."

So awesome. I love it.

Erin | Wed, 04/03/2013

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

:)

I love this. It feels like a song by Fleet Foxes or Last Bison. Love this.

Kyleigh | Wed, 04/03/2013

Aw, guys! I'm sitting here

Aw, guys! I'm sitting here smiling right now. :) You guys are awesome!

Kassady--LOL!! Thank you. :D I just wasn't expecting to see a cardinal dead. It seemed so much sadder, for whatever reason.

Lucy--Haha! Oh, thank you. Especially for reading them, because I definitely rambled. I really appreciate it. :)

Erin--Thank you!! :D It's so nice of you to read!

Kyleigh--Thank you as well! So much!

Thank you all. :) I so appreciate these comments. And you taking the time to read my writing, much less comment.

Madeline | Wed, 04/03/2013

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

Wow

Okay, so I'm exactly sure what I was expecting, but it wasn't this. I loved it!

Especially the first stanza:
There he, there he goes
flitting 'cross the sky
red, bold-winged and beautiful
even cardinals die

I don't know what it is about it, but it just about took my breath away. It's almost like you tempered the images with each other; you made it all seem more real.

And I loved the red pen story. :) I do the whole don't-forget-don't-forget thing quite a bit myself. :)

And here is another smiley for good measure. :)

little woman | Thu, 04/04/2013

The most astonishing thing about miracles is that they happen.
-G. K. Chesterton

Wow, wow...

...wow. I realize this is very old, but I still had it bookmarked to read, along with a lot of your other poetry. And you kind of write a lot of poetry - not that I think that's bad because I think writing a ton is GREAT - but I just don't have much to say about most of it. But this was lyrical and mysterious and full of imagery and I read it three times before I decided I should leave a comment.

Anna | Sat, 08/17/2013

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

Yes, I definitely do! Haha.

Yes, I definitely do! Haha. :) Thank you for even reading, much less commenting. It means a great deal. And thank you for your feedback on this. It was so kind and wonderful. I smiled a bunch. So thank you.

Madeline | Sun, 08/18/2013

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

I still come back and read

I still come back and read this sometimes. I have it bookmarked - one of my favorites.

Anna | Fri, 05/15/2015

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

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