Shadows in the Moonlight

A Poem By j. Glen pollard // 11/20/2013

Did you know a Shadow can have shadow?

I do.

I found that at 9:40 pm.

While being shone on by the Moon.

I held up my hand, and placed it on the door.

And instead of finding one shadow, I found instead four!

My finger moved up one

The Shadows followed soon

Then down left and up right

Those Shadows followed too!

When the door was finally opened, the Shadows have finally left

And I crept up the stairs into my bed.

And I see the Moon's light from the window

The shadows bobbed, to and fro.

The Moon's bright light slowly shows.

Comments

Really quite good. It brings

Really quite good. It brings a dark, shadowy, but moon-like picture in my mind. The only things are you don't need a comma after "bobbed" and I think that the last line's "slowly" almost marrs the perfectness of this poem. I just think you shouldn't have put an -ly word in such a descriptive poem. Sorry I didn't comment earlier; I forgot all about this.

Edit: Also, this was actually a pretty good first. I was surprised to see a poem from you, especially since you don't like poetry. Guess this is how Apricotpie affects all of us - now most of us all are turned-poetry-appreciators/lovers? :)

Lucy Anne | Sat, 11/30/2013

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson

Lucyanne

Thanks. The last poem I had written was 4 Darius's dedication... THREE YEARS AGO!!!!!

j. Glen pollard | Sun, 12/01/2013

"The trip is a difficult one. I will not be myself when I reach you."-When I Reach Me.

Also

P.S. I forgot 2 give the Nisly's "Joey's Story". :( how was your story?

j. Glen pollard | Sun, 12/01/2013

"The trip is a difficult one. I will not be myself when I reach you."-When I Reach Me.

Three years ago? I didn't

Three years ago? I didn't know.

I erased the rest of my comment, and emailed it, since it doesn't have much to do with this poem, but your comment.

Lucy Anne | Mon, 12/02/2013

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson

Good poem!

The only thing I don't like, is the two exclamation marks. But that's more of a pet peeve of mine, so there's nothing actually wrong with it, and I think they actually suited this subject in the poem...if you get me?!
If you write other dramatic or serious poems, I wouldn't put exclamation marks in. :D
Overall, great first try! And I DO want more...

Maddi | Mon, 12/02/2013

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh