A Song of the Dawn

A Poem By James // 1/27/2009

Delicately, heaven’s gems are glittering up high,
Aglow as flames, till one by one they sputter out and die.
With all their smiles, the dark as well hath come to melt away;
Now see this countenance of joy – the coming of the day!

Come, see the East, ’tis ever bright’ning
Over earth’s far distant edge;
Most like to fire, the sky is fright’ning,
Even now, its rays are spread
To greet the coming bright one’s light’ning,
Hov’ring just above its bed.

Here, the brilliant bead hath come! It kisseth earth and sky,
Establishing its time of rule, its full revealing nigh;
Round and golden, strong and warm, it seemeth now to say:
E’er see this countenance of joy – the coming of the day!

Comments

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This is extremely well writen, James!
Keep it up!

Nathanael | Wed, 01/28/2009

We are waiting for the long-promised invasion.
So are the fishes. ~ Winston Churchill

Amazing. I can't imagine how

Amazing. I can't imagine how much thought must have gone into writing this.

Tamerah | Wed, 01/28/2009

Amazing!!

Oh that's beautiful! How long did it take you to write this? It must have taken a long time to figure out the acrostic and then rhyme it. Not only that, but the words and the idea is perfectly lovely.

"A wizard is never late, nor is he early; he arrives presicely when he means to." Gandalf

The Brit | Wed, 01/28/2009

That is simply gorgeous! >

That is simply gorgeous!
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-Elizabeth Swan//Pirates of the Caribbean//Curse of the Black Pearl

Sarah | Wed, 01/28/2009

"Sometimes even to live is courage."
-Seneca

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Heaven’s gems are

Heaven’s gems are glittering up high...
Lovely...
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He who is near to his Captain is sure to be a target for the archers.
-Amy Carmichael

Anna | Wed, 01/28/2009

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

Lovely as always James. I

Lovely as always James. I love your pieces - on one hand, I can appreciate the effort and workmanship. On the other hand, the flow, meter and rhyme are so well done that there's a certain effortlessness to it as well. Nicely done.

Christa | Thu, 01/29/2009

I love it! Keep it

I love it! Keep it up!

"Remember when 'you play like a girl' use to be an insult?"
-Mia Hamn, American Olympic soccer star.

"Being cool is not acting cool."
-Anonymous

Erin | Fri, 01/30/2009

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

Thank you

Thank you for the encouraging words, everyone! I'm glad to know that you can see a flow in it. I employed a strict use of rhyme and meter, allowing no exceptions (although I hedged a little with the word edge in the middle stanza, as it doesn't exactly rhyme with spread and bed). I was afraid that I might be sacrificing flow and imagery for the sake of my rhymes and rhythms. And perhaps to some extent I did, but if you can still picture the sunrise in your mind when you read the poem, then I am glad. Thank you all again for your kind words.

James | Sat, 01/31/2009

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"The idea that we should approach science without a philosophy is itself a philosophy... and a bad one, because it is self-refuting." -- Dr. Jason Lisle

It reminds me of Job

It reminds me of Job 38:12-13: "Have you ever given orders to the morning, or shown the dawn its place, that it might take the earth by the edges and shake the wicked out of it?"

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He who is near to his Captain is sure to be a target for the archers.
-Amy Carmichael

Anna | Sun, 02/01/2009

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

Awesome and

Awesome and lovely.
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"Elves and Dragons! Cabbages and potatoes are better for me and you. Don't go getting mixed up in the business of your betters, or you'll land in trouble too big for you." — Hamfast Gamgee (the Gaffer)

Clare Marie | Sun, 02/01/2009

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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]

James, You've done it

James,

You've done it again... Bravo.

Ezra | Sat, 02/21/2009

"There are no great men of God. There are only pitiful, sorry men whose God is great beyond measure." - Paul Washer [originally Jonathan Edwards]

Beautiful

Beautiful! Amazing!
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The Word is alive/and it cuts like a sword through the darkness
With a message of life to the hopeless/and afraid...

~"The Word is Alive' by Casting Crowns

May my words be a light that guides others to the True Light and Word.

Julie | Fri, 05/01/2009

Formerly Kestrel

Simply lovely! I couldn't

Simply lovely! I couldn't pick a favorite line/verse if my life depended on it.

Damaris Ann | Sat, 03/14/2015

My thoughts are not your thoughts, neither are your ways my ways, saith the Lord. For as the heavens are higher than the earth, so are my ways higher than your ways, and my thoughts than your thoughts.
‭‭Isaiah‬ ‭55:8-9‬

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