The Crow

A Poem By Kassady // 7/14/2016

I watch with wary eye the perched crow,
Though his movement be idle,
As his black beaded eyes lust for company,
Empathy another binding title.
He opens his sharp tongued beak
To speak of other grackle,
With which he fights for sky;
My approval he hopes to tackle.
Black breast reflecting the sun,
-Won over once by mischievous eyes-
Bejeweled face with obsidian,
A meridian left of tears and lies.
I call upon his wings to rest,
Breast beating with uncertainty,
But midnight feathers flap to outstretched arm,
No alarm of heart with new loyalty.


I LOVE this! I could picture

I LOVE this! I could picture it all in my mind's eye and absolutely love the imagery you used. And they rhyming. Ooh it's good.

Damaris Ann | Thu, 07/14/2016

I don’t thrive off of chaos: chaos thrives off of me.

Very nice! I especially love

Very nice! I especially love the internal rhyming of "obsidian" and "meridian."

Hannah D. | Thu, 07/14/2016

"Reason itself is a matter of faith. It is an act of faith to assert that our thoughts have any relation to reality at all." - G. K. Chesterton

Damaris and Hannah, thank you

Damaris and Hannah, thank you both so much for your lovely comments!!!! I'm so glad it portrayed a good visual! I love playing with words and imagery and hoped this would create a clear image.
Hannah, the obsidian and meridian rhyme is due to the meter of the poem which is the poetry meter Tolkien created for his poem Errantry (it's such a fun poem you should look it up)!
Thank you both so much!

Kassady | Thu, 07/14/2016

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
Write On!

Loved it! I liked the "sharp

Loved it! I liked the "sharp tongued beak". Also liked the "obsidian / meridian" rhyme like the others said, too. I got excited when I noticed it was related to your last poem :D

Sarah Bethany | Thu, 07/14/2016

Sarah Bethany, thank you so

Sarah Bethany, thank you so so much!!! Haha, I'm glad you noticed! Yeah, I feel like I'm creating a series of poems... Maybe I'll make it into a book? Bu thank you for noticing and for your lovely comment!

Kassady | Fri, 07/15/2016

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
Write On!

Love this!

Oh Kassady! I love, love, love this! The imagery and rhyme are perfection. I adore when writers step outside of the box with poetry and do some more daring rhymes, especially using rhythm. I love Tolkien and can see a hint of his influence in this :) Great job! Blessings to you!

P.S. Would totally love a series of this ;)

Wings of Eternity | Sun, 07/17/2016

"Be an example to all believers in what you say, in the way you live, in your love, your faith, and your purity." 1 Timothy 4:12

Wings of Eternity-

Thank you so much for your awesome comment! I love feeling so supported here on AP! The best compliment by far is probably your mention that this feels Tolkienish, thank you, thank you, thank you!!!
And it'll be slow work to post all of what will go on a series page (I don't want to drown the home page with all my bird/crow related poetry) haha, but I shall eventually, thank you!

Kassady | Tue, 07/19/2016

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
Write On!

I love this bird-inspired

I love this bird-inspired series! I feel all you need now are some illustrations and you could make it a little collection. Beautiful work! Your rhythm and rhyme are both dynamic and spirited--it adds another layer of interest entirely to the poem beyond its words. **Edited for bad grammar. lol!

Madeline | Thu, 07/21/2016


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