Siren Song

A Poem By Kassady // 7/26/2017

Siren Song
You say my name,
Like you're casting a spell,
Like every letter tastes good
and you can't get enough.
The tongue,
With which you speak,
Has bewitched me,
Vanity a secret key
to the doors of my heart.
Every smile infused syllable,
Slides like slow hands,
Wrapped round my chest,
Every breath,
I want them on me.
Say my name and I am bound,
Intent upon inflection,
Every word an investigation.
So helplessly under your spell,
Your voice,
A siren song.

Comments

I liked a lot of the wording

I liked a lot of the wording you chose to use in this poem. They were expressive and made sense as I read.

Libby | Wed, 07/26/2017

“The gospel alone is the power of God unto salvation.
Therefore, suffer, yes. Be misunderstood, yes. Be shamed, yes. But do not be ashamed. For the joy set before you, take up your cross, follow Jesus, be shamed and despise the shame!” -- John Piper

Thanks Libby!

Aw, thank you Libby! There is nothing more satisfying for a writer than to hear that their writing makes sense and is clear while also showing off their vocabulary ;P

Kassady | Thu, 07/27/2017

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!

I really adore all the

I really adore all the instances of rhyme in this, and I find it poignant in the way that it's structured and paced. Each line feels like a piece of a bigger whole, and then it snaps together at the end of every stanza. It's very clean that way, and very sweet.

I love this:

and you can't get enough.
The tongue

Just that little taste of rhyme--the enough and the tongue is so great, it just jolts you into this trance when you're reading it.

I think at the same time, too, you could read this several times before you notice all the little meanings in it. At the same time it's straightforward, the poem has a lot of instances where it would take a pause to really let it all catch up, to sink in.

I love how you focused just on the verbal aspect of being infatuated with someone...how you cling to what they say. You did that so well. This is one of my all-time favorites of yours!!!

also, fave part:

Every smile infused syllable,
Slides like slow hands,
Wrapped round my chest,
Every breath,
I want them on me.

Madeline | Thu, 07/27/2017

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

Spell-binding! I read it more

Spell-binding! I read it more than once and felt its power :)

Sarah Bethany | Thu, 07/27/2017

I really liked this! The

I really liked this! The imagery in the first few lines are so interesting and unique:
"You say my name,
Like you're casting a spell,
Like every letter tastes good
and you can't get enough.
"
In love!

Madalyn Clare | Thu, 07/27/2017

"To live is to love with the passion of a thousand stars. To love is to live despite the pain of a thousand scars. Anything in between is a passing shadow." ~Michael Joseph Murano

Thank you all so very much :D

Thank you all so very much :D I was really proud of this piece and your encouragement and lovely comments just make me more proud and excited that I was successful!

Kassady | Tue, 08/01/2017

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
---
Write On!

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