Waiting~Teleporter (Rhymless Poetry 12)

A Poem By Kassady // 5/31/2014

Waiting
Impatiently waiting 
For something out of reach
Just waiting
Foot taps the floor
Waiting for something
Some movement
Some time
Some thing
Refresh 
Exasperated sigh 
Slower than molasses
Nothing has changed
Nothing new 
Nothing again 
Glancing at the clock
Still waiting
On time

Mother Like Daughter
Mirror image, 
A little part of you plays out, 
Imparted into me, 
Passed on, 
One generation to the next. 

Little Girl
Sweet little girl, 
Pink lips and bright eyes, 
So young, 
So innocent, 
So guiltlessly happy. 
Sweet little girl, 
With eyes that shine, 
And a tongue too big for her mouth, 
Lisping slightly.
Soft cheeks, 
Cutest nose,
Bubbling with gratitude,
So happy to be loved.
So good, 
So pure, 
So sweet. 
Sweet little girl, 
Turning six, 
Grow up slowly, dear, 
Please, 
Grow up slowly. 
Sweet little girl, 
Growing up too quickly, 
Please, 
Stop growing up too quickly, 
Stay sweet, 
Sweet little girl, 
Forever. 

Sugarplums
I wish I could always believe, 
In rainbows and lollypops, 
Fluffy clouds and grassy plains, 
Sugarplums, 
Cotton candy, 
And sunny days,
But I can't.
It's not that I'm depressed, 
Sad or dejected, 
It's not like I'm negative, 
In fact! 
I'm the most positive person, 
You'll ever meet,
I just have my moments.

Blister
Blister, 
Painfully protruding,
And it makes me think
How painful it'll be, 
When I see you again. 

Too Weird?
Have I gone too far, 
This time, 
Or possibly any time before that? 
Have I crossed the line, 
Which was clearly unclear? 
Have I said too much, 
And let slip, 
How absolutely odd I really am? 
How weird, 
Bizarre, 
Completely and randomly crazy. 
Have I gone too far, 
Traversing in awkward terrain? 
Have I crossed the line, 
Which I didn't know existed, 
Until now? 
Have I said too much, 
In my haste, 
To show you how I feel? 
Maybe next time, 
I should stick to the surface, 
Remain normal... Er. 

Teleporter
Teleportation would be useful,
I can't see a reason why it wouldn't, 
Teleporting would be grand, 
I don't see why I can't have it, 
Now! 

Comments

Hello! I read these a while

Hello! I read these a while back and have been a lazy commenter. :P But here I am now!

Waiting - I so get this. I get this feeling quite often! haha! It's kind of frustrating. I think it's a rule of teenhood or something, but...yeah, I really liked this. Especially the slower than molasses line. That makes for a really perfect visual that ties back into the poem. :)

Mother Like Daughter - This is short but effective. I love your use of "imparted" here. Don't know why, just do! haha

Sweet Little Girl - ...wasn't it supposed to be seven? Haha! ;) In all seriousness, I really like this poem. It's adorable, and it's kind of nostalgic and sad in other ways.

Sugarplums - I really love the first half of the poem. The second kind of took away from the whimsy of the first, to me, for whatever reason. I think "I can't" may have been the most perfect place to end but I also understand wanting to make it clear that you're not a despairing person. haha! Just realistic. This poem was very no-nonsense. I liked it! Oh, and as a note: lollypops should be lollipops. :D

Blister - Ooh, I like this. That is all.

Too Weird? - Haha! I love the end. Remain normal...Er. hahahahaha! This was really well done. Again, get this feeling. ;P

Teleporter- This one didn't have quite the flow or feel or the relatability that the other ones did, so it was just kind of vague.

This was a good set! I liked them! Please do post more, and soon.

Edit: And no, I didn't see much of a difference. *sigh* But I'm terrible with meters. Other than these did have a kind of repitition or flow to them. It had a lot of one or two word lines. :)

Madeline | Thu, 06/05/2014

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

Oh em gee!!!

Haha! Thank you so much for your comment! I LOVE YOU! Haha!
Honestly the inspiration for Waiting was my impatience with AP :P haha! I was waiting for people to comment on other things. We had like a whole week where no one seemed to be reading anything! :P
Nope it's six! Not seven :P
Oops okay, Lollipops! I always forget that! Thanks for the critiques!
Yeah... Teleporter... I was concsidering just leaving that one of the bunch... But I added it anyways! Oh well. It's a more personal poem, of wishing I had a Teleporter :P
Thank you SO much for reading, and commenting! Love it!
I didn't have a meter, I just wanted to see if people noticed the choppiness of these... I was hoping readers wouldn't, so yay! They DO flow! Thanks so much again! I'm posting more right away :)

Kassady | Sat, 06/07/2014

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
---
Write On!

Oh em gee!!!

Haha! Thank you so much for your comment! I LOVE YOU! Haha!
Honestly the inspiration for Waiting was my impatience with AP :P haha! I was waiting for people to comment on other things. We had like a whole week where no one seemed to be reading anything! :P
Nope it's six! Not seven :P
Oops okay, Lollipops! I always forget that! Thanks for the critiques!
Yeah... Teleporter... I was concsidering just leaving that one of the bunch... But I added it anyways! Oh well. It's a more personal poem, of wishing I had a Teleporter :P
Thank you SO much for reading, and commenting! Love it!
I didn't have a meter, I just wanted to see if people noticed the choppiness of these... I was hoping readers wouldn't, so yay! They DO flow! Thanks so much again! I'm posting more right away :)

Kassady | Sat, 06/07/2014

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
---
Write On!

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