Child of Darkness, Chapter 3

Fiction By Keri // 3/4/2009

Korin walks over and knocks on the door. “Hey! We need a new lamp in here!” There is no response. He pounds harder and finally we hear boots clattering on the stone.
“What’s going on in there?” an irritated voice sounds from the other side.
“We need a light. The lamp just went out.” Korin responds. Suddenly, without the sound of anything opening a lock, the door swings open and light spills back into the ink that is our cell. An extremely annoyed face covered in brown beard glares at Korin.
“Well, there’s no need to shout and pound. I was in the middle of a nice meal upstairs. You could’ve just gone to get a light yourself. It’s not like you were locked in.” I am very surprised. We weren’t locked in? Scelerisal said we would get three days head start but I hadn’t thought she would just throw us in an unlocked dungeon cell.
“Why aren’t we locked in soldier?” Danielle’s voice sounds imperious.
“Oh don’t go talkin’ like a bloody queen. Under the new law, you ain’t any higher than me.”
“C’mon, just answer the question please Bonzo. I’d like to know too.” Korin says, his voice sounds tired.
“Ah whatever. It’s cause she doesn’t care how you get out of here if you get out by being escorted by her men or sneak out because your door’s not locked. It makes no difference since she’s gonna catch you anyway ya do it.”
“Thank you Bonzo. You can return to your supper now.” Bonzo turns and stomps away. Korin turns to us “I’ll go get a fresh lamp.”
Danielle, who has been standing sits down again on the hay and buries her head in her hands. I am trying all I cannot to think about the ink pressing in on us, trying to crush my very soul. What did my parents look like? I wish I could remember them. I wish I could anything. I seem able to remember impressions. I knew that Scelerisal was evil and that Danielle is someone I love. Maybe the rest will come to me later. I reach up to rub my forehead and feel dried blood. I quickly withdraw my hand. It hurts like a thousand spears. Not that I know what a thousand spears feels like. On the other hand, maybe I do since I was a warrior prince. How did it happen that everyone failed to notice such an injury? Maybe they did notice but didn’t say anything. I guess it was understandable if I was hit with a rock and the hilt of a sword. I suppose it was either the trauma of losing my parents or the impact of the hilt that made me forget everything. I am inclined to suspect more of the latter. Maybe as the wound upon my brow heals so will my memory. I can only hope so.
Korin enters with a lamp in his hand and Danielle does not eve look up. “Good day Korin.” I greet him. He puts his hand on my knee in greeting. “You don’t talk much do you?” I ask him in a low voice. I don’t particularly want to talk either but I don’t want silence to descend right now and Danielle doesn’t seem like she’s going to talk.
“I don’t feel like talking since the queen killed my family.” He says matter-of-factly. I take a deep breathe.
“She truly s horrible isn’t she?”
“That she is.”
“She’s not really the queen.”
“No, I guess not.”
“Danielle is.”
“No, she isn’t”
“No?”
“You are the king.” I am the king. He is right.
“Korin?”
“Yes your Majesty?”
“Where are we?”
“We are in the dungeons at the castle in Iugosus, the mountain region”
“Iugosus. Is that the name of the kingdom?”
“No, that is the region where the castle is. Your kingdom is named Vangaardewen but the current ruler calls it Gnalasa.”
“Vangaardewen is a good name.”
“Yes it is.” After he says this, we wrap ourselves in silence again. Even though I tried to prevent it. After a while, Danielle lifts her face from her hands. Her face is wet with tears. She laughs humorlessly as she dries her face with her sleeve.
“I’m feel like I’ve been a tearful wreck since I though t you dead during the battle of horns.” I put my arm around her and lightly squeeze. She lays her head on my shoulder. “I promise you that this as the last time though. I was just letting put all my tears for past present and future. Until you are crowned king, I will refrain from the indulgence of tearfulness.” With this, we all fall into silence and I, into sleep.

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Comments

Oh that awful queen! for

Oh that awful queen! for some reason while I was reading this I kept thinking of the White Witch when she ways, "I have no interest in prisoners; kill them all.." with that horrible monotone voice that she does.
This chapter is really good, but I can't wait to find out were the story leads:)
Also--I have absolutally, posotutilly no suggestions for the name of the castle:( Sorry! Names are definitly not my area of expertice:)
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Ariel | Thu, 03/05/2009

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"To produce a mighty book, you must choose a mighty theme. No great and enduring volume can ever be written on the flea, though many there be that have tried it." -- Herman Melville

Maybe Ingomerson for the

Maybe Ingomerson for the kingdom? Of course you could have 2 names, one for the real name and one for the name that he evil queen gave it.
Old Fashioned Girl, love your quote! :0) That was my favorite part in that whole movie...Edmund rocks!
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And now our hearts will beat in time/You say I am yours and you are mine...
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Heather | Thu, 03/05/2009

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And now our hearts will beat in time/You say I am yours and you are mine...
Michelle Tumes, "There Goes My Love"

Yea that's my favorite part

Yea that's my favorite part too:) THose names you suggested sound really good. Hehe, listen to me, saying I like something for a story that's not even mine:) LOL Sorry, Keri!!!!
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Ariel | Thu, 03/05/2009

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"To produce a mighty book, you must choose a mighty theme. No great and enduring volume can ever be written on the flea, though many there be that have tried it." -- Herman Melville

No prob. I like it too. hmmm

No prob. I like it too. hmmm two names hadn't occured to me... I like it. And about where the story goes. ummm I have no idea. I'm kinda playin' this one by ear.
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Keri | Thu, 03/05/2009

Yay!!!!!! It's the new

Yay!!!!!! It's the new chapter! (I sound like a game show). I like the queen/thief/conquerer/whatever. But then again, I think that the White Witch has no end of complete coolness. Poor Natty....I would go crazy if I couldn't remember anything.

As for a name.....no clue, no clue...By the way, what does the queen's name mean?

The Brit | Thu, 03/05/2009

Sceleris means Wickedness in

Sceleris means Wickedness in Latin. I added "al" after I decided that everyone who is born of noble blood's name ends in an L sound. It's funny that this makes you all think of the white witch that didn't even occur to me.
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Keri | Thu, 03/05/2009

The land has names! Both

The land has names! Both have a (rather strange) story behind them if you want to know what they are you have to ask! Also I just realized that nobady noticed my little joke. The name of the irritated guard. Bonzo. You know, Bozo the clown and Gonzo the... whatever? Ok, ok, I get it no one cares.
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Keri | Sat, 03/14/2009

Well, I want to hear about

Well, I want to hear about the names even if no one else wants to:) So start telling!!!
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"It's King Edmund, actually. Just King though. Peter's the High King. I know, it's confusing."--Edmund Pevensie

Ariel | Sat, 03/14/2009

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"To produce a mighty book, you must choose a mighty theme. No great and enduring volume can ever be written on the flea, though many there be that have tried it." -- Herman Melville

Vangaardewen is a tradition

Vangaardewen is a tradition I have started (it can be an author trademark or something) everytime I make a fantasy type story I name the land after the badguys in the video game my older brother is currently obsessed with. In this case, the Vangaard is a group of bad guys (and gals.) And the other name, Gnalasa, is what I had for dinner that ight with the letters mixed up. unscramble them and you will know what I had for dinner monday, March 9. :)
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Keri | Sat, 03/14/2009

I didn't read this, but Brit

I didn't read this, but Brit told me about it, and i have to know, is it Lasagna?

"This is most inconvenient, as I have swarn to loath him for all eterinty". Elizabeth Pride and Prejugdice

Alecia | Sat, 03/14/2009

It awoke with a shrill shreak that can be trnaslated "How dare you leave me in this bed, when I am asleep and helpless?" My sister

yup. I was feeling

yup. I was feeling unimaginative.
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Keri | Mon, 03/16/2009

You needn't think that she's

You needn't think that she's an unscrambling genious, because she put the letters in the Google and found it that way. The cheater. I personally think it's a great idea (except that my brother doesn't have an obsession with any game).

"The more I see of the world, the less inclined I am to think well of it." Elisabeth Bennet (Pride and Prejudice)

The Brit | Mon, 03/16/2009

Actually I didn't think she

Actually I didn't think she was since I figured everyone would look at it and imediatly go "is that lasagna mixed up? what kind of weirdo is this?" Well my brother isn't obsessed per se. He's more like really into it right now. I don't know if you're familier with the Zelda games but the bad guy in just about every single one is a dud called Ganandorf But I always accidently called him Ganadwarf. So I just called a land Gandworfia. That was the first one I ever did. You could do bad guys from a book you recently read or something like that.
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Keri | Mon, 03/16/2009

i like this too. It's really

i like this too. It's really good! Please write more and put it up! Please? I can't wait to find out what happens!
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Kendra | Thu, 03/19/2009

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"Are you sure this water is sanitary? It looks questionable to me! But what about bacteria?"--Tantor the elephant from Tarzan.

This is so good. It flows

This is so good. It flows very smoothly, and keeps your attention. Which can be a very hard thing.....yeah.
I really like this, when are you posting more? Oh and congrats on getting first place.

"Here are the beauties which pierce like swords or burn like cold iron." C.S.Lewis

airlia | Tue, 04/21/2009

"It is foolish and wrong to mourn the men who died. Rather we should thank God such men lived."
General George S. Patton

Cool. sounds like Eragon.

Cool. sounds like Eragon. You know that the guy who wrote Eragon was just 15? You could be like him. Just please don't trash this story with magic like he did.

I am Nate-Dude | Thu, 06/04/2009

Nate-Dude

I did not know that. I

I did not know that. I always thought he looked young in his pictures. Don't worry. It's far too late for magic to appear even if I wanted to include the stuff.

Keri | Thu, 06/04/2009

Hey I had a dream last night

Hey I had a dream last night about the boy - what's his name? The king. Anyway, I had an awesome dream about what he was before he lost his memory, and it's amazing.

"True love is the greatest thing in the world - except for a nice MLT - mutton, lettuce and tomato sandwich, when the mutton is nice and lean, and the tomato is ripe." - Miracle Max, from The Princess Bride

Bridget | Thu, 06/11/2009

"I always wonder why birds stay in the same place when they can fly anywhere on the earth. Then I ask myself the same question." - Harun Yahya