Solemn Farewell

A Poem By Libby // 11/21/2017

When she died
I cried,
and I
can’t explain the hurt inside.
I laid my head
Down on the bed
So much to say,
But in that silence, all was said.

Still, she looked into my eyes
after so many tries
said, “I
love
you.”

That was enough
her feelings
true
when she told me
“I love you.”

People often say
that they
only remember days
when loved ones acted
strange
or mean
or embarrassing.
But I
am different;
my
memory
leaves out all the sad
the bad—
when she was mad.

I think of her
only when she was glad.
Her smiles
no trials
disturbed
or perturbed;
so hardly unnerved.
Sweet and singing,
her voice
ringing
in the dead of day
doubts flinging
far away.

My
solemn farewell
I
sing it until
I see her again
my pain
turns to joy.

Comments

Wow... Libby, this is so

Wow... Libby, this is so beautiful.
I really like how you kept a rhyme throughout it so that you knew how the pace went.

Madalyn Clare | Wed, 11/22/2017

"To live is to love with the passion of a thousand stars. To love is to live despite the pain of a thousand scars. Anything in between is a passing shadow." ~Michael Joseph Murano

:)

I love this. Freeverse tends to feel more raw to me for better communication of deeper emotions!

The only thing that stood out in a negative way to me was this part -
strange
or mean
or embarrassing.
- embarrassing was a bit jarring because all the other words were a single syllable.

Kyleigh | Sun, 11/26/2017

Madalyn: Thank you so

Madalyn: Thank you so much:)
Kyleigh: Thanks! Would 'awkward' or 'silly' read better? Or would it be better to have a single syllable? This question is for anyone. ;)

Libby | Sun, 11/26/2017

“The gospel alone is the power of God unto salvation.
Therefore, suffer, yes. Be misunderstood, yes. Be shamed, yes. But do not be ashamed. For the joy set before you, take up your cross, follow Jesus, be shamed and despise the shame!” -- John Piper

great!

This is a really good poem! It's very heartfelt; makes people think that you experienced it yourself. It's wonderful!

Suggestion: Would putting the circumstances in make the poem more powerful? Put more of a picture in the reader's mind.

SURPRISINGPERSON | Sun, 11/26/2017

Liana Wood

Thanks, Liana! You made my

Thanks, Liana! You made my night.
I'll try and weave the circumstances in. I might not get to it too soon, but, I mean, eventually...
;)

Libby | Sun, 11/26/2017

“The gospel alone is the power of God unto salvation.
Therefore, suffer, yes. Be misunderstood, yes. Be shamed, yes. But do not be ashamed. For the joy set before you, take up your cross, follow Jesus, be shamed and despise the shame!” -- John Piper

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