He Used To

Fiction By Maddi // 5/5/2014

He didn’t say hello. He didn’t say goodbye. The thing that struck me hardest was that he used to. He used to bring me coffee in bed. He used to sing love songs to me in the shower. He used to kiss me, just because he could. I was his, and he was mine.

When it first started, I told myself he was having a bad day. A few days passed, then a week. It turned into months and then years. Slowly they rolled by, painfully.

Now it seems a dream that he used to.

His smile, still there, lingering in my memory, is the only remainder now.

* * *

The snow beneath my skirt started to drench beneath it where I knelt. I rang my finger one last time along the edge of the gravestone. My tears traveled slowly down my cheek, dripping onto the ice where they froze instantly.

I kissed the tips of the red roses and let them fall to the ground. I inhaled deeply, the cold air seeming to freeze my lungs.

I had to move on. I had to start again, without him.

But of course, I had my memories to keep me company.

Comments

Aw, this was sad :/. One

Aw, this was sad :/. One thing though: instead of he used too, it should be to. Too translates to additionally, whereas to indicates action. Other than that, good job!

Erin | Mon, 05/12/2014

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

Thanks Erin! Yes, tis on the

Thanks Erin! Yes, tis on the sadder side.
Ah, thankyou for the 'too's'. It's actually pretty weird, I looked back on my draft, and it had all the right ones *shrug* oh well!!
Thanks again! It's always nice to get a comment from you. :)

Maddi | Wed, 05/14/2014

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

Sweetly-sad.

This is very beautiful Maddi! I love how, despite how short the snippet is, you make the whole story so vivid and real. You give the reader a brief glance, and it's quite enough, because its gorgeous! This is really sad, and I honestly don't want a sequel to this one :P But still hoping for a "Robert" sequel ;)
Loved it! Hope to read more snippet's soon!

Kassady | Wed, 05/14/2014

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!

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