sometimes

A Poem By Madeline // 6/5/2017

there are
sometimes
when I look at you and see
someone elevated
past the primal point of being
perfection personified and
then
personifying.

you're not
done yet
this much I can see
that those
sometimes
are not times
to grasp onto in a dream
to cling to and
drink to til you
wither into ink.

oh, wait
wait, wait
I gave up on
journaling

and some
sometimes
when I see you
seeing who I'd want to be
if the cards
aligned
the stars
had shined
and chanced so
chance could let us see.

but mostly then
just mostly
I find that you're a need
a simpering sort of thing
is this
this want, a constant clawing
sense
that if only
could not speak
that maybe then
those sometimes
would dispel a fantasy.

and then of course comes I
with my ever-wanting mind
searching for a
better best but
finally redeemed.

Comments

LOVE!!!!! So very interesting

LOVE!!!!! So very interesting to read, and I love the way it flows!

Kassady | Tue, 06/06/2017

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
---
Write On!

LOVE!!!!! So very interesting

LOVE!!!!! So very interesting to read, and I love the way it flows!

Kassady | Tue, 06/06/2017

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
---
Write On!

:)

I really like this! I love how, at the beginning, it almost seems as if you're talking about another person, and then it becomes evident that you're rather talking about yourself. "finally redeemed" is such a satisfying final line as well! Great work.

Sarah Liz | Fri, 06/09/2017

"Knowledge is knowing that a tomato is a fruit; wisdom is not putting it in a fruit salad." ~ Anonymous

And then Damaris gets on and

And then Damaris gets on and goes "Wait, she's talking about herself???" Ahhhhhh this is so good, Madeline. I've actually read it maybe five times already, just drinking in the imagery and flow. This is definitely my favorite from you yet!! I can see this as being the most popular when you publish your book of poetry someday. Because, obviously; you have to. ❤

Damaris Ann | Fri, 06/09/2017

My thoughts are not your thoughts, neither are your ways my ways, saith the Lord. For as the heavens are higher than the earth, so are my ways higher than your ways, and my thoughts than your thoughts.
‭‭Isaiah‬ ‭55:8-9‬

Hello, girls! Thank you so

Hello, girls! Thank you so very much! <3 You are all super duper lovely!

Kass--thank yooooooou always! xo

Sarah Liz--how lovely to receive a comment from you! thanks so much!

Damaris--I'm so pleased to hear from you. You are so kind and sweet and you give such uplifting feedback. Thank you! And awww, the encouragement there at the end. I feel the same about your work, just so you know! :)))

Madeline | Sat, 06/10/2017

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

Aww, that really means a lot

Aww, that really means a lot to me. Really.

Damaris Ann | Sat, 06/10/2017

My thoughts are not your thoughts, neither are your ways my ways, saith the Lord. For as the heavens are higher than the earth, so are my ways higher than your ways, and my thoughts than your thoughts.
‭‭Isaiah‬ ‭55:8-9‬

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