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Lonely
Plastered on the once blue skies,
These drab clouds are rolling by,
I've never seen a sadder day,
Now I'm all alone.
Roses wilting, once so red,
A path of valor, soldiers bled,
Fades into distant memory,
Now I'm all alone.
Long forgotten and packed away,
Pictures of loved ones lost in the fray,
The tears that fall, let them be,
Now I'm all alone.
[[Note: This is my first poetry in awhile. I would like criticism so I can get better, but try not to be too harsh. :)]]
These drab clouds are rolling by,
I've never seen a sadder day,
Now I'm all alone.
Roses wilting, once so red,
A path of valor, soldiers bled,
Fades into distant memory,
Now I'm all alone.
Long forgotten and packed away,
Pictures of loved ones lost in the fray,
The tears that fall, let them be,
Now I'm all alone.
[[Note: This is my first poetry in awhile. I would like criticism so I can get better, but try not to be too harsh. :)]]
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filed under: grief | loneliness | sadness
Thank you, Velocity! That helps. :)
EDIT: I edited that in, I like it better.
~*~
When life gives you lemons, make lemonade.
Coolio,
And did u take that picture yourself? its realy neat!!
:)
*happy face*
No, I didn't. I wish I did. :P I got it from deviantart.com.
But this is getting off-topic. XD We should stop now. :P
~*~
When life gives you lemons, make lemonade.
I like it! :)
maybe the now, lonely could be changed to 'Now i'm all alone.' Keep writing more! :)
*happy face*