Alone

A poem by marie | 9/2/2008
You hide behind a facade of indifference
Your face is shadowed, though not by darkness
You lay beneath your blanket of lies
A shield to protect you from Truth's cunning edge
You belittled everyone you have ever known
And you wonder why you now dwell alone
You are deemed nothing more then a pariah in this unfeeling generation
Life does not leave room for alteration
You have chosen your fate
And in it you must lie
It is now that you realize, you're not even alive
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Anna | Tue, 09/02/2008 - 8:22pm

Wow. This is really good.

marie | Thu, 09/04/2008 - 6:14pm

Thanks Anna, I'm glad you liked it :)

Anna | Fri, 09/05/2008 - 2:35pm

I just wanted to say that it's great you're writing a book. I'm writing one too- it's alot farther along now than I ever thought it would get- so I know how it feels to just want to throw it out when the editing gets tough and you don't feel like you'll ever get anywhere with characters or chapters or plots. One thing that's really good is to have one of you're friends be your "editor"- in a loose sense of the word. For instance, I have a good friend of mine who also loves to write look over my chapters as I finish them and point things out before I post them. She'll comment about this here, or notify me about this there. It's really helpful.
And one more thing- The book might seem hopeless now, but it really isn't. I left SOL alone for a year because I coudln't think of anything, and now it's got 18 chapters. :D

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Love me, love my friends.
-Anne of the Island

Falling Leaves | Sun, 09/07/2008 - 10:45pm

That was great! Very passionate and beautiful.

Falling Leaves-unschooler, horse lover, and obsesser over writing, reading and proper grammar.

marie | Mon, 09/08/2008 - 12:47pm

Thanks for the advice Anna!!

marie | Mon, 09/08/2008 - 12:48pm

Thanks!! I'm glad to see a few people enjoyed it.