A Fall May Come

A Poem By Sylver // 2/16/2017

For a fall may come and the tide may roll
Should I ever look back, I'll miss you so.
Can a child try to dream to reach his goals?
Should I run, run far back to land I know?

For a fall has come and the tide has turned
The fire within blazes too hot to hold.
How long will I stay before I get burned?
How long before my soul is sold?

For a fall may come and the tide may swell.
Should I ever look back, I'll wish you well.
A child can dream, he has a story to tell.
Running will surely end in hell.


Great Symmetry

Wow... this was great! I really like the parallel thought in each verse, especially the first and last verse, where lines 2 becomes more confident in the third verse, and then lines 3 and 4 are questions that become answers.

And the imagery... I like how you combine "fall" with a picture of the tide coming in.

Great work!

James | Thu, 02/16/2017

"The idea that we should approach science without a philosophy is itself a philosophy... and a bad one, because it is self-refuting." -- Dr. Jason Lisle

WHOA! I love this poem! It

WHOA! I love this poem! It has a feel of literature, kind of story-like. I was drawn in on the first stanza! Great job!
Welcome to AP!

Madalyn Clare | Thu, 02/16/2017

Introverts unite!
From the comfort of your own homes!

This is really good! I love

This is really good! I love how the rhythm and rhyme adds to the drama of the poem's subject. Welcome to Apricot Pie, I look forward to reading more from you!

Hannah D. | Fri, 02/17/2017

"Reason itself is a matter of faith. It is an act of faith to assert that our thoughts have any relation to reality at all." - G. K. Chesterton

Thanks everyone!

This was a bit of an older poem that I wrote almost two years ago, but I'm glad you like it. All of my stuff from now on will be current.

Sylver | Fri, 02/17/2017

“True humility is not thinking less of yourself; it is thinking of yourself less.” - C. S. Lewis

Welcome to AprictotPie, my favorite corner in the vast internet

Hey, and welcome! James really said all I wanted to say, so I shall refrain from my rhapsodies over your awesome poem. Well-done, and bravo! I applaud you, sir.
I look forward to seeing your next contributions to this site.

Damaris Ann | Fri, 02/17/2017

I don’t thrive off of chaos: chaos thrives off of me.

This was great! Welcome to

This was great! Welcome to ApricotPie! -- I liked the fact that I didn't know whether you meant a downward fall or an autumn, and I liked playing with both ideas in my mind. I liked the longing and speculation in this. Thanks for posting and can't wait to see more!!

Sarah Bethany | Thu, 02/23/2017


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