Old Cat
Just something I thought I'd share - my very first poem =)
I come
Home
And there
I find old cat.
Sweet serene loving
old cat always
there just lying
there waiting
for you to get home.
Just something I thought I'd share - my very first poem =)
I come
Home
And there
I find old cat.
Sweet serene loving
old cat always
there just lying
there waiting
for you to get home.
Comments
Adorable!! :) I love it.
Adorable!! :)
I love it. "Serene" is not a word I knew when I was seven, LOL. :)
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Katie Marie
BFF To Katie Sara
kayteesonlinejournal.blogspot.com
:)
So cute!!
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This is so you - I can totally see you writing this when you were little - you've always had a thing for cats. (Not that I blame you - they're absolutely wonderful creatures!) I like the rhythm of the last few lines - "always there just lying there waiting for you to get home"... it has a good feel. :)
I don't like how in the
I don't like how in the beginning it says 'I come home' and then in the end it says 'waiting for you to get home'. Of course I can't expect seven year old me to have written anything incredibly amazing, so I've tried my best not to critique it too much =)
Definitely cute though, I find it very amusing.
Your Nerdfighting Sista
Oh I can just see little cute Tami dreaming of having her own cat and writing this poem. Oh so precious : )
Awwww.....
Awwww.....So cute. I wrote lots of stories. Once I wrote on called "Shiny the Unicorn" when I was five. It was really cute....
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