Two Children, an Enchanter, and Three Horsemen; Questions!

Fiction By Teal // 2/24/2009

Hi there! I have finished the first half of my story. WoooHOOO!!! :D It's always really helpful for me to hear new ideas and suggestions. So please give me any thoughts you might have... :]

1. Should I add any new characters?

2. Should I make any changes to the plot line?

3. Any new 'bad guys'?

4. Change of setting? (For example: desert, ocean...)


5. *What should the name of this world be?*

[I originally began with Zion...but now I'm not so sure that I like it... I would especially like a name that has a meaning... :D]


6. *What should my title be?* Do you like the one I thought of? If not, what do you think it should be?

I am thinking of adding a boy character for Will's sake.

7. If I do, what should his name be?


8. How do you like my story so far? Am I moving to quickly? Too slowly? Not enough "action?"

Thank you so much for your comments! I really appreciate them! You guys are so much help!



1: New characters? Yes.

1: New characters? Yes. Maybe one or two

2: Your current plot line is excellent, I wouldn't change anything at this point

3: New bad guys? Definently!

4: A lake. Yeah.

5: I have lots of ideas! Androgle, (:P, jk) Semirhage, Manetharene, Ghiarn............

6: The Quest, The Three Questers, The Search for the Diadem, The Redemption of [insert name of worls here]..........

7: A boy character? Maybe..........but if you do my sister says he has to be cute. :P
Matrim, Ranle, Bart, Trab, Elnar, JoJo. :)

8: I love the story so far! It is excellent.

Sarah | Wed, 02/25/2009

"Sometimes even to live is courage."

Blogging away!

Cool! I've got a lot of new

Cool! I've got a lot of new ideas now.. So far I'm liking Semirhage or Ghiarn and for the boy's name I'm liking Matrim. Thank you so much!


Anonymous | Wed, 02/25/2009

1. If they won't contribute

1. If they won't contribute to the story, you probably shouldn't. I have trouble with this. :/
2. I think this plot is good. Don't change it, by any means. If you'd like to make it more elaborate or intricate, though, that would be cool.
3. It would be cool if you had a bad guy that didn't seem automatically bad, y'know? Or someone who's not originally bad, but then betrays them.
4. Depends on the geography of the world.
5. Opar-wenth. Don't ask, I just looked at my keyboard and those are the letters that stood out. *shrugs*
6. I think the title's fine, too. Do you want to change it?
7. No clue.
8. It's great!!!
In this sinful world there is no such thing as "peace" unless someone strong enough is willing to protect and defend it. -Norm Bomer, God's World News

Anna | Wed, 02/25/2009

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

Two Children, an Enchanter, and Three Horsemen; Answers!

1. Go ahead. There aren't very many as it is but more isn't neccesary
2. Absolutly not
3. Nah
4. go ahead
5. I'm bad with that sort of thing
6. I like this title. It reminds of A lion, a Witch and a Wardrobe
7. John Jacob Jingle Heimer Schmidt
8. The only problem I have with your story is that you said something about it being halfway through. Too short! I think it should be longer than 20 chapters. Other than that I love your story.

I personally predict that the world will come crashing to a halt if you don't forward this to 50 Gazillion people by noon tomorow!!
-me (in parody of a chain e-mail)

Keri | Wed, 02/25/2009


Well, I actually meant I am one third through, cause I am planning for three acts. Great! Thanks for your thoughts, :D

~ Teal

Anonymous | Thu, 02/26/2009

1. Yeah. I think you need

1. Yeah. I think you need another companion or something.

2. No. I love the plot as it is.

3. This one kind of goes with the first question, but not quite. I think there should be another person who isn't trusted in the beggining, and then is trusted, and then betrays them, and then comes to their rescue. Just a thought (a very dramatic thought).

4. Not sure, but if I were pressed on the subject, I would say no.

5. I like Zion.

6. I like the title as it is. Leave it.

7. Marcus, Conrad, Ike (for some reason I like these names). I could probably think of more, but you're probably happy to be spared them anyway.

8. I think it's fine. Wouldn't make any changes, except I want to know how time works between the two worlds. Because if it all goes around the same time, they've been gone an awfully long time.

It takes people a long time to learn the difference between talent and genius, especially ambitious young men and women. --Little Women

The Brit | Thu, 02/26/2009


Alright... Thanks to you guys, I have tons of new ideas! :) Here are some of the things I'll be doing:

1. Yes, one character who is definitely going to contribute to the story. :)

2. Alright, I won’t make any changes to the plot line… By the way, I’ve got some excitement coming up soon… ;)

3. There is one new bad (??) guy. (You’ll see why I put those question marks there later.)

4. Change of scenery: The lake and also something else…I almost gave it away… :)

5. Alright, I’ll stay with Zion as the world name.

6. I’ll keep my title too.

7. I’m adding a boy character and his name is Matrim. Thanks so much for the name, Sarah! :)

Sarah, Anna- Thanks so much! :)

Keri- Haha! Ok, I’m adding in a part for your sake…(and my own!!!!!) I enjoy writing this so much! I don’t want it to end… lol

The Brit- Yeah don’t worry about the time-thingy—you’ll see how it works at the end… lol

Thanks so much, you guys! I cannot tell you how much I really enjoy reading through your comments! :) I'll be posting Chapter 11 soon... ;)


Anonymous | Fri, 03/06/2009

YAY!!!! You're so nice to

YAY!!!! You're so nice to me! Maybe I'll write you a sonnet! (Ok, I probably won't since I'm not all that sure HOW to write a sonnet...)
I personally predict that the world will come crashing to a halt if you don't forward this to 50 Gazillion people by noon tomorow!!
-me (in parody of a chain e-mail)

Keri | Fri, 03/06/2009

Hey, when this is done, you

Hey, when this is done, you should totally write a sequel. BTW, Keri, a sonnet is ABAB, CDCD, EFEF, GG. That's one of the rhyming styles.

"It is man's inherent nature to scare himself silly for no good reason." - Calvin and Hobbes

Bridget | Sat, 06/13/2009

"I always wonder why birds stay in the same place when they can fly anywhere on the earth. Then I ask myself the same question." - Harun Yahya

Hey do you know what? I was

Hey do you know what? I was totally thinking of doing that!!! Maybe I will... ;)

~Teal :)

Teal | Sat, 06/13/2009


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