To Capture a Journey

A Poem By Wings of Eternity // 3/15/2011

Note: All right this is very different from the poetry I usually write and was wondering what others thought about it. Those around me that are familiar and comfortable with my poetry style are a little confused by this piece. To help explain without ruining other's interpretations, this is a metaphorical piece on my journey with Jesus through His Spirit that works in my life. Let me know your thoughts! Thanks!

 

Cascading rays of light clash with sensibility,

Can what is infinite be measured?

All that is within me, a fight worth living for

surround gold and silver strands of Love.

 

Call upon stardust to glow,

Fill the soul, break away from ground,

Clothed in fragrant flower’s splendor,

Awaken the life I yearn to live.

 

Treading in golden footsteps,

Along rainbows of glass,

Gazing through invisible windows,

while holding the key that unlocks all.

 

Pillars of emotion hold fast to its belief,

Since when is following fire safer?

Raw power tunnels through

that which is still unknown.

 

Stay steadfast in this current

that both terrifies and pacifies,

Find anchor in the whispered breath,

for a promise was given.

 

Remember well the vibrant halls

hewn by the Ageless One.

Caressed into perfection

to hear my footsteps ring.

 

Follow eternity unbound by time,

to meet the dazzling winds.

Colors swirl in reverence

in awe of what is not mine.

 

Comments

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I had to read it a couple of times--and will probably a third and fourth after I comment! This is one of those poems that makes you think over every verse. I read it sort of hurried so I could comment I'd seen it! LOL! ;)

Call upon stardust to glow,

Fill the soul, break away from ground,

Clothed in fragrant flower’s splendor,

Awaken the life I yearn to live.

Those lines (for me!) stuck out. I love the melody to those lines. This whole poem paints a beautiful picture! I would advise people who didn't understand to re-read it slowly, go through it as if it's a book, and just really get the gist of it! This is a very deep, thoughtful poem, sort of melancholy in a good way! And it has it's bright moments, too. It's sort of layered!

I wrote a poem a little like this called "Innocence." (Alike in the sense it is sort of thoughtful...) Have a look and see what you think, if you will! And I do enjoy this! It's really nice.

Keep up the good work! Good good good! :)

HomeschoolGirl

Madeline | Wed, 03/16/2011

everything was better when/you would call and I'd be like/yeah babe, no way

I like this a lot. Like

I like this a lot. Like HomeschoolGirl said, it paints some vivid pictures in the mind. Keep up the good work :D

Laura Elizabeth | Wed, 03/16/2011

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The best stories are those that are focused, unassuming, and self-confident enough to trust the reader to figure things out. --

http://lauraeandrews.blogspot.com/2014/05/dont-tell-me-hes-smart.html

Thanks!

Thank you for your wonderful comments HomeschoolGirl and Laura Elizabeth! I am very estatic that you both liked it! Thank you very much for taking the time to read my work and commenting! I was worried, but perhaps it was a bit deep for some people. I will read and comment on your poem as soon as I can! Thanks again!

God Bless,

Wings of Eternity

Wings of Eternity | Wed, 03/16/2011

"Be an example to all believers in what you say, in the way you live, in your love, your faith, and your purity." 1 Timothy 4:12

I am impressed!

I am very impressed with this work!

Amazing poem through and through!

Ditto to Homeschoolgirl! I loved that one line, it definitely stuck out more then all the rest for me! It was just like it was tree limb that snagged on my hair, I had to stop and untaggle it, but that took some thinking over! And if that doesn't make any sense :) Just forget it! LOL! This was awesome! Your wording was priceless!

There are some poems we read, remember, but don't want to read again... But this one! This one will be charished ever single time its read and reread! Awesome job!

Well done!

Keep it up!

Write on!

Kassady | Sat, 04/09/2011

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!

Wow thanks!

I am just so grateful that everyone is liking this poem so far. I have written quite a bit of poetry, but this one is definitely one of my all time favorites! I am glad that you love the stardust lines! To be honest when I write, I do not even worry too much about flow because most of my poems come to me in whole lines. A lot of the time I do not even think about it because I am too busy writing as fast as I can to get it down on paper! I always say that God is the author and I am simply His scribe because there is no way that I could come up with some of these lines myself! Thank you again so much for lovely comments! I glad that this poem has re-readbility! I know exactly what you mean with some poetry, it isn't always memorable (I've written some of those too lol). I'm glad that you think this is a poem to be "charished"! I nearly cried when I read that! Thanks so much dear and I'll try to post some more stuff for everyone soon!

Wings of Eternity

Wings of Eternity | Sat, 04/09/2011

"Be an example to all believers in what you say, in the way you live, in your love, your faith, and your purity." 1 Timothy 4:12

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